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Ryleigh_Sarkissian
Ryleigh_SarkissianLv13yr
2021-09-25 00:04

As soon as you tell that your from another world it just ruins the story. Its a immediate turn off. It just ruins the story. Good start otherwise but im gonna stop here.

Beast Lord in Demon Slayer

ASHARA
4.2
105 Chs

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ASHARA
ASHARAAuthor

Thanks for the review. I know that it's certainly unusual in most fanfics but I wanted to write that part because it made sense to me but it's still my first fanfic ever so I appreciate the opinion. I'll try to do better in the future.

3yr
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holson_Charles
holson_CharlesLv15

Was about to read ,,well thats a turn off for me to,, thanks for warning.

3yr
14
Lucass
LucassLv4

F am out take care.

ASHARA:Thanks for the review. I know that it's certainly unusual in most fanfics but I wanted to write that part because it made sense to me but it's still my first fanfic ever so I appreciate the opinion. I'll try to do better in the future.
3yr
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Bob_Uchiha_XD
Bob_Uchiha_XDLv4

Options to ruin a fanfic or story: - Reveal that you are from another world. (The exception is if the physical appearance is NOT human). - Reveal that you are a reincarnation or transmigration. - Reveal that you have a "gamer system", "gold finger", "unique powers (example: manipulate the mind)"... - Being a babysitter or a dog. Babysitter, is when Mc becomes a secondary or filler character. Mc is dedicated to taking care of and fixing the stupidities of the original main character. Dog; when Mc is the original main character's dog.lick boots, be submissive, be beta.

ASHARA:Thanks for the review. I know that it's certainly unusual in most fanfics but I wanted to write that part because it made sense to me but it's still my first fanfic ever so I appreciate the opinion. I'll try to do better in the future.
2yr
12
ErickHenrique_BR
ErickHenrique_BRLv5

Faltou Clone and NTR/Netorare

Bob_Uchiha_XD:Options to ruin a fanfic or story: - Reveal that you are from another world. (The exception is if the physical appearance is NOT human). - Reveal that you are a reincarnation or transmigration. - Reveal that you have a "gamer system", "gold finger", "unique powers (example: manipulate the mind)"... - Being a babysitter or a dog. Babysitter, is when Mc becomes a secondary or filler character. Mc is dedicated to taking care of and fixing the stupidities of the original main character. Dog; when Mc is the original main character's dog.lick boots, be submissive, be beta.
2yr
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SystemEngineer
SystemEngineerLv4

same

holson_Charles:Was about to read ,,well thats a turn off for me to,, thanks for warning.
1yr
Damian0481
Damian0481Lv13

mate have you never learned of the one rule in fics? dont ever fking tell others you are a reincarnated person...

ASHARA:Thanks for the review. I know that it's certainly unusual in most fanfics but I wanted to write that part because it made sense to me but it's still my first fanfic ever so I appreciate the opinion. I'll try to do better in the future.
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