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Mike_Sanders_8848
Mike_Sanders_8848Lv13yr
2021-07-30 19:01

Poorly written and the characters are all one dimensional. The girls exist just to love writer's self insert. Made worse when said self insert isn't likeable at all

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MakimaChan
MakimaChanLv11

Finally someone I can agree with

Layios
LayiosLv11

This review in my opinion is too rash. The novel doesn't deserve 1⭐ nor does it deserve all these 4-5⭐. The writing quality is good unlike most of the author on WN. The big problem is there's too many world with complex plot that are merged together so the plot that author is trying to create is messed up and rly bad. It's an FF so can't dream of having the exact personality of the girl from the original but if possible they should not be far and in this novel it was like it for some girls like Mia(in my opinion too tsundere). Also another bad points it's about the relationship between MC and girl, it's not well planned like he flirt and goes to too many girls without confirming his relation with the one he's right now. I recommend author to make a plan with how MC takes action before writing so that story not messed up.

Fellbane
FellbaneLv11

False. This fic is not poorly written in the slightest. The grammar and sentence structure are on point. The plot is a little frustrating as the interractions with the girls can be dragged out without confirming anything between them but thats it.

Bobnog13
Bobnog13Lv1

Maybe you're someone with low standards *shrugs*

Fellbane:False. This fic is not poorly written in the slightest. The grammar and sentence structure are on point. The plot is a little frustrating as the interractions with the girls can be dragged out without confirming anything between them but thats it.
Mike_Sanders_8848
Mike_Sanders_8848Lv1

Dude did you really just try to say someone's opinion is false? What are you 12?

Fellbane:False. This fic is not poorly written in the slightest. The grammar and sentence structure are on point. The plot is a little frustrating as the interractions with the girls can be dragged out without confirming anything between them but thats it.
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Alexandertheokay
AlexandertheokayLv3
Yuri_is_Ntr
Yuri_is_NtrLv5

I whould keep this simple and easy. There is a huge problem with pacing. Too many characters needs to be introtuced, too many girls needs attention, and too events happened in a small amount of time. When author asked what did you expect from mc, he wasn't in a world for even a week-yes, he wasn't. But maybe he should and that is a problem? 30 chapters we a not even in rizer arc. Shinmai maou in like 5 episods? So when you have so little time and so many characters all others problems comes in naturally. Why mc spending his points in useless stuff and wouldn't even train for a bit with his sword, or buy skills that whould help him improver himself? Especially when you lost so many internal monologues of how grave and serious situation he is? Because mc is not even one week in the world, making him op whould be boring. Even though getting op for toujo basara with boosted gear and skill creation - whould be easy-peasy. But oh well. Why all the changes are so close to original or lackluster? Because there is so many different stories that creating different dynamics are hard. Too many variables need to be adjusted. Why it's feels like old school rpg when all progres in side quests whould be nulled until main quest getting to the next point? Like saya talks about her feelings then just getting forgotten for 10 chapters straight. Same with different girls. Until main heroine wouldn't come they are on hold. You could skip whole chapters without any differences. What is power system, how different factions whould fair against each others? What whould elder brother of rias whould say about they unnoficial contract? Between mc and rias. Could he get in this mess with mc who have a lot of ties with different factions. Iseei was ideal, because he is just a human. Conclusion :the story like a pazzle. Author trying to make it work without knowing a whole picture.

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