Review Detail of Brian_Hanes_117 in Twin Dancer Aura Master

Item: Twin Dancer Aura Master
Rating: 4.8

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Brian_Hanes_117Lv12yrBrian_Hanes_117

A good story all in all. I would add a bit more to spice this story up though. Only a couple of grammar issues, but I won't hold that against you. Honestly, I think that a bit of description of the environment and characters may be useful. I would also try changing the pace just a bit. Spice it up a little more and add a bit of tension.

Twin Dancer Aura Master

TheBlackHatMan

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TheBlackHatManAuthorTheBlackHatMan

Yeah I know right? I am struggling the most in describing the surroundings and I am almost clueless as this is my first writing. But I am still try and I will always update when I can improve any part. Thanks for your opinion. I will keep these advice in mind. ^^

2yr

TheBlackHatManAuthorTheBlackHatMan

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TheBlackHatMan:Yeah I know right? I am struggling the most in describing the surroundings and I am almost clueless as this is my first writing. But I am still try and I will always update when I can improve any part. Thanks for your opinion. I will keep these advice in mind. ^^

2yr