The first chapter is a nice hook! Grammar could use some slight improvement but the plot is great! I'll be interested in seeing what comes next! Would recommend? Yes.

The story has potential but there are a few grammatical errors and the dialogues can be improved, I guess. Like when you say, "Hold onto my hand", you can say "Hold my hand", it makes the dialogues look more interesting. It's just my opinion, feel free to disagree.

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Author instantly hooks the reader in with an amazing first chapter. This is a story not only for readers, but for authors to learn how to take their craft to the next level. Please give this a read for your own sake <3

I can’t really say anything about the world background and the update stability since this has only just started, but everything I have seen so far is really interesting. It’s suspenseful, and keeps in mind the character’s point of view.

This is soo far one of the well written story I came across in the past two weeks. The representation of the story is very visual for me as I could clearly form the scenes in my mind due to the well descripted way it was written. I really liked the way author used dialogues which helped me connect with the story. I am really looking forward to what this story has for it's reader as new chapters come along. Keep up the good work author :)

It's intriguing. The way the author makes the reader tries to guess the next course of action is great. The flow of the story is superb while the description and dialogue are good. This is a good book. More of it. 🌹🌹🌹

The author's style of writing is what caught my attention first. First paced but still descriptive and the plot itself is something refreshing. I honestly felt like a sci-fi movie was unfolding before my eyes. I'll be waiting for more from the author 🤗

Writing Quality: Good and readable Updating Stability: Superb and always updated! Story Development: Nice pacing Character Design: It's nice and clean World Background: Had enough to engage more readers.