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Iceyunderground
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2022-04-21 21:47

Writing Quality: (4/5) Easy to read with little to no issue with the writing structure itself. Not perfect but still leagues ahead of many other novels. Stability of Updates: (5/5) I started reading when there were already a nice selection of chapters available, so I didn't really run into any update issues. Story Development: (1/5) Honestly, just read the One Piece manga and you'll know exactly what happens. I read up to ch 18 and nothing significant changes in the story. I mean, the MC does do some things that SHOULD make a big impact buuuut... nothing. Character Design: (1/5) The only true OC character is the MC and he feels like any other MC from the mass of other generic fanfics. I get that some events take place that make you want to care about him, but he just feels very.... boring, bland, edge lord almost in a way. Point is it's difficult to truly take him serious after a point. World Background: (5/5) I feel this one is kind of a cheap/cheat five out of five. While the novel doesn't feel like it fails at any world background connecting stuff, it also doesn't feel like it goes out of its way to actually try either. Summary: This feels like any other generic One Piece fanfic out there. The only thing the novel does is add in the MC to the One Piece crew and have the surrounding cast react to the MC's abilities or fall in love with him; all whilst following the original One Piece story line. To be fair though, the author does state that this novel is a wish fulfillment piece of work. Good overall for a first step into writing a fanfic; you got great writing punctuation and clean writing, so work and build off of that. As far as your next novels (or the next world for the MC if you want to go that route), just be more creative and be more willing to expand beyond the pre-established narrative of the source material. Be more courageous with just throwing your MC out there or something like that. Anyways, good job on your novel so far but I'll be waiting till it improves somewhat.

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Thanks for the ACTUAL review. You have given me a lot to go off of and I'll try my best to improve. Also, the will be world travelling.

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I look forward to seeing/reading your future works then. Good luck.

PassiveAtom5140:Thanks for the ACTUAL review. You have given me a lot to go off of and I'll try my best to improve. Also, the will be world travelling.
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