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Mel_Aniv
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2021-05-14 12:10

I have no problem with the plot and story quality. But there is a problem with writing style that made me press the brakes of my car and run then brake again in succession. There is sometimes sentenses that doesn't start with capital letters and there's an overuse of commas in the story. Maybe you should lessen it? Haha....peace my friend ✌️ I don't want to be a critique BTW but I think you needed it the most right now 😉

Wolf in the desert of ice

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Mel_Aniv
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Review swapper here author! Hope you check mine called "The Grandmaster Of All Job Class", please 🙏 😉 ❤️

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JimothyJonkers
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Thank you or your review, I will definitely check your novel out

Mel_Aniv:Review swapper here author! Hope you check mine called "The Grandmaster Of All Job Class", please 🙏 😉 ❤️
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Nice story at all. Though there's some issues with letters and punctuations I think it's a great story! You defined your plot nicely and I don't believe you are a new writer! However, keep it up!

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The story is captivating. I wanted to just scan through the first three chapters but I got curious and kept going could not stop, since I wanted to know what will happen next. I love the free flow of narration. For me the story is worth the read.

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