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Exargna
ExargnaLv12yr
2022-02-12 13:51

Extremely boring fan fiction. The characters are banal NPCs. The dialogues between the characters are stupid and monotonous, I constantly see praise for the main character there. The author, it seems, has never met a girl, relationships are not built like that, well, no, at 6-10 years old to arrange a "sexy" massage, from what do girls end up? What kind of nonsense is this? Why are there so many spam reviews without any normal criticism? Although what do I expect from working in webnovel, especially with the tag "harem".

In Naruto with Slightly Perverted System

SupremeCookie
4.8
151 Chs

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Exargna
ExargnaLv1

I forgot to add a couple more facts about the main character: a huge envy of Naruto, the hero seeks to take everything he has. The main character has no purpose, he is just a dummy programmed to satisfy his "harem".

2yr
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SupremeCookie
SupremeCookieAuthor

Hello there. First of all, thanks for your review. This fanfic isn't supposed to be taken seriously. I added lots of memes that it is almost a crack fic. As for the dialogues, this is my first time writing so I do not know how to create dialogues properly. I'm sorry. As for his goal, I don't know if this can be called a goal, but in chapter 1, he just wanted to live a satisfying life while in the later chapters, he wants to protect his family and do what he wants. Thank you for taking the time to read my comment. Bye.

2yr
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Exargna
ExargnaLv1

Greetings to you. Thank you for your positive response. Although it was an idea for entertainment according to you, but watching the characters when they are too "inanimate" is extremely boring. I wish you good luck in your writing. Arrivederci.

SupremeCookie:Hello there. First of all, thanks for your review. This fanfic isn't supposed to be taken seriously. I added lots of memes that it is almost a crack fic. As for the dialogues, this is my first time writing so I do not know how to create dialogues properly. I'm sorry. As for his goal, I don't know if this can be called a goal, but in chapter 1, he just wanted to live a satisfying life while in the later chapters, he wants to protect his family and do what he wants. Thank you for taking the time to read my comment. Bye.
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