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Crater
CraterLv52yr
2021-11-27 11:56

Story has an interesting take on the game elements and the characters have been given more development than the average Chinese xianxia, but the story can get a bit annoying at times when things aren't properly explained. My biggest gripe, however, is the frequent spelling and grammar mistakes. Some of these should be easily caught with a basic word processor, but many others are homophones or just similar sounding words that are not at all related. If these were infrequent I wouldn't mind so much, but they often occur several times a chapter or even multiple times in a sentence to the point it becomes illegible. Going over some of these earlier chapters to fix these mistakes would probably be a good idea to retain new readers.

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WordlyMysteries
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I understand that they can indeed be tedious, sadly most of them go over my head, I'll try to give them another go!

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This story feels rushed I and I believe others would be able to enjoy this story more if you, the author, put more time working on the base of your story. It has an interesting plot that personally interested me but from what I have read is being, and I mean well when saying this, terribly executed. The utter lack of details of the power system is annoying one chapter the mc is level 10 the next he saying he's basically level 25, which would be cool in all if we were told what he did to get to that level. We never see the mc fight like ever. The mc has a master class that allows to forcibly enslave from what we know any being and he gets 50% exp from their kills but we never get told how much exp a being gives which in turn just makes it feel like the author just levels them up conveniently. It is also said that the levels get increasingly hard to level up after certain marks for instance at level 25 it get harder and then 50 and so and so forth but the mc and his slaves seem to be leveling up even faster than before. I also seen that the author planned this story all the way up to volume 9 which I was originally excited about but you honestly wouldn't be able to tell if he just thought of on the spot none of this story seems well thought out. And don't even get me started on the fact that every interaction the mc has is with a girl and they conveniently have amazing potential. I have seen people put more effort into fanfics than this story and I'm not trying to discredit the author but its just what I get when I read your story. Its a pure wishfulfilment story. The author put most of his effort into describing his characters which doesn't matter if their setting is a blank canvas.

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