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illusoryforce
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2021-10-14 06:49

First time I'm reviewing a novel. All in all, I live this book. There's little grammar errors that doesn't take away from understanding what's happening. The concepts used so far are interesting.

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WordlyMysteries
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Thank you! I will try to fix those pesky errors sooner or later, and I hope you enjoy your time reading!

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FalseProphet_
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This story feels rushed I and I believe others would be able to enjoy this story more if you, the author, put more time working on the base of your story. It has an interesting plot that personally interested me but from what I have read is being, and I mean well when saying this, terribly executed. The utter lack of details of the power system is annoying one chapter the mc is level 10 the next he saying he's basically level 25, which would be cool in all if we were told what he did to get to that level. We never see the mc fight like ever. The mc has a master class that allows to forcibly enslave from what we know any being and he gets 50% exp from their kills but we never get told how much exp a being gives which in turn just makes it feel like the author just levels them up conveniently. It is also said that the levels get increasingly hard to level up after certain marks for instance at level 25 it get harder and then 50 and so and so forth but the mc and his slaves seem to be leveling up even faster than before. I also seen that the author planned this story all the way up to volume 9 which I was originally excited about but you honestly wouldn't be able to tell if he just thought of on the spot none of this story seems well thought out. And don't even get me started on the fact that every interaction the mc has is with a girl and they conveniently have amazing potential. I have seen people put more effort into fanfics than this story and I'm not trying to discredit the author but its just what I get when I read your story. Its a pure wishfulfilment story. The author put most of his effort into describing his characters which doesn't matter if their setting is a blank canvas.

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