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2021-05-02 08:21

REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) 馃槈

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Omg thank you so much, I was worried about my story but this really relaxed me and boosted up my confidence, thanks a lot :)

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You are welcome! Thanks that you liked it!

_Ana_16_:Omg thank you so much, I was worried about my story but this really relaxed me and boosted up my confidence, thanks a lot :)
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