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kurama09
kurama09Lv43yr
2021-04-28 08:55

lo que no me gusta es el cambio de edades de los personajes , pero todo lo otro esta muy bien 👍.,..............................................,..............................................,..............................................,..............................................,..............................................,.............................................

Game Of Thrones: Tommen The Great

Kenny_Landers
4.9
9 Chs

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Kenny_Landers
Kenny_LandersAuthor

So...you don't like that the MC is marrying an adult and would rather he was marrying a 13-year-old girl? Okay boomer from the middle ages.

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NevoNeko
NevoNekoLv14

He didnt say that, thats just reaching on your part.

Kenny_Landers:So...you don't like that the MC is marrying an adult and would rather he was marrying a 13-year-old girl? Okay boomer from the middle ages.
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Kenny_Landers
Kenny_LandersAuthor

If that's reaching on my part, it's being nitpicky on his/hers. Out of all the things to care about in a book (grammar, characters, world building), they chose to care about the ages of the characters? It's just weirdly suspicious, is all.

NevoNeko:He didnt say that, thats just reaching on your part.
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NevoNeko
NevoNekoLv14

The way I see it a lot of people like it to be consistent to the books. Easily solvable with the AU tag tho.

Kenny_Landers:If that's reaching on my part, it's being nitpicky on his/hers. Out of all the things to care about in a book (grammar, characters, world building), they chose to care about the ages of the characters? It's just weirdly suspicious, is all.
3yr
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kurama09
kurama09Lv4

the grammar is fine along with the characters I only say about the ages because of the timeline, it was just a comment the story is very good and I'm going to keep reading that was all. I think I didn't justify why I didn't like it the changes of ages and therefore create a misunderstanding ??

Kenny_Landers:If that's reaching on my part, it's being nitpicky on his/hers. Out of all the things to care about in a book (grammar, characters, world building), they chose to care about the ages of the characters? It's just weirdly suspicious, is all.
3yr
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Great story. Good writing. I just hope you don't drop it. I like it that you didn't make him too op.Also please keep up the regular updates.Great story. Good writing. I just hope you don't drop it. I like it that you didn't make him too op.Also please keep up the regular updates.Great story. Good writing. I just hope you don't drop it. I like it that you didn't make him too op.Also please keep up the regular updates.

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