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Idczhen
IdczhenLv143yr
2021-04-27 07:30

Reading the first 5 chapters, I want to point out something. Jake Lin, a defected human who can't use his right hand but is a genius at mathematic. It seem like everything was normal as he got home to see his older sister, playing that popular game and possibly became a professional gamer. Then it all went spiral and out of control when she decided to use some code which caused a huge disaster and Jake Lin became unconscious, only to wake up with a "system". So far, this storyline is intriguing and kept me interested but one flaw thing about this novel is the formatting. It got a little bit difficult to understand when the conversation is jumbled up in one paragraph. I suggest the author to separate the paragraph into 1-2 sentences for us reader to read it clearly and not get confused. I wished to say more but so far with only 5 chapters out, I can only wait for more to see the development and how Jake Lin will utilize his system to benefit him such as, getting rid of the handicapped status.

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00_darkness_00
00_darkness_00Lv11

reading the 5 lines of your review, i want to say something....add spoilers tag pls

Idczhen
IdczhenLv14

Wel…. it should have been obvious when I say I want to point out something

00_darkness_00:reading the 5 lines of your review, i want to say something....add spoilers tag pls
ChimkinNuggie
ChimkinNuggieLv15

I agree.

xSyNox
xSyNoxLv14

I agree about format that made me confuse and I gonna stop read because of it. The story is good but more I read more I confuse so I give up. bye.

Missy_Rain_0120
Missy_Rain_0120Lv15

uhm... is it a spoiler when it's in the first few chapters? I think almost everyone will give a book the 10 chapter test. IE read the first 10 chapters, and if you're not interested stop there.

00_darkness_00:reading the 5 lines of your review, i want to say something....add spoilers tag pls
Simba_Mudzira
Simba_MudziraLv1

true

vargasb
vargasbLv14

There isn’t really any spoiler. Its only of the 5 chapters and its more like a review on a trailer This review was just helpful and not an actual spoiler

00_darkness_00:reading the 5 lines of your review, i want to say something....add spoilers tag pls
Rocky_Das_0527
Rocky_Das_0527Lv2

I agree

noxity
noxityLv1

you wrote a really detailed review, so can i ask you a tiny favor please. Can you please point out flaws in the book I'm currently writing? It would mean alot to me. thank you 😁

John_Lopez_5440
John_Lopez_5440Lv1

....😳

noxity:you wrote a really detailed review, so can i ask you a tiny favor please. Can you please point out flaws in the book I'm currently writing? It would mean alot to me. thank you 😁
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Author's note: There are few things that should be cleared before you pick up the story and give it a go. 1. The intention of writing this gaming novel is not to educate noobs. There are so many gaming novels talking about every skills dragging hundred of chapters in increasing the levels of the skills and blah blah. So to say you won't find cliche things. If you cannot digest something new then do not try this story. 2. My writing style differ. I am an original author and I have my creative space so my writing has its difference which might be new or unacceptable for many of you. So if you decide to read it then it means you can tolerate different writing style. If you still complain then your complains would be considered groundless. 3. I am not native English speaker and English is my fourth run on language. You can expect grammer 'degenration' at many points in the novel. If you feel sour reading poor grammer based story then my suggestion is to save your taste buds. 4. I have no plans of including romance or harem in this story. 5. This story is created in alternate universe so keep your common sense limited to yourself. 6. I will be hiring artist to draw main characters so that you can have general idea about our MC's team. 7. If necessary I will create character lists and the list of professions other than the weapons. Anyone interested to take look at those lists can join my discord server. 8. Enjoy the story development with the author. Have questions other than the above mentioned then leave a comment here.

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