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2021-06-09 11:25

Animal communication powers ftw >:3 The majority of the writing flow is great, but the few moments where it slips up stand out all the more for it due to the contrast, but future edits will sand it down nice and smooth, I'm sure. All things that are bound to improve with time and practice, the content that's there is good and that's what matters the most anywho. Besides, what hiccups do exist are all still well above the average you'll see across this site. The initial setup to get the FL and ML to meet is a touch forced, but you gotta get there somehow and it's better than just starting already in the castle without acknowledging it. What matters is what happens when it's all actually underway after all. Interesting characters for sure, bound to be lots of fun over the course of the entire story <3

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