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god_man_69420
god_man_69420Lv32yr
2021-12-02 16:51

he story starts off quite well. i hope the other people besides main and side characters will have more "color" as they seem bland and well they don't even have names. the main character is also very bland. we only know his name and background. we don't know how tall he is, what is the color of his hair or eyes or what kind of face structure he has. the background of the world seems interesting and i hope there will be chapter to explain more how the universe and galaxies are structured and how they are connected to the other realms/plains. the only really bad and annoying part of the novel is that the writing quality is bad and the writer isn't consistent with the story. in the realm where the mc fights the insects he somehow had a wooden spear. there was no explanation how he got it and next he found a blade from a dead guy. first he calls it "long knife" and then he calls it "long blade" the spirit of the mc is spear type and i hoped he could've just used the wooden spear, of course i understand that a blade made of metal is stronger but he had no idea how to fight with blade and he had instincts from his past life to help him fight with spear so the change of weapon didn't make much sense.

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WindMaster
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this is basically a copy paste of another comment from 8 months ago. wow

god_man_69420
god_man_69420Lv3

i know

WindMaster:this is basically a copy paste of another comment from 8 months ago. wow
god_man_69420
god_man_69420Lv3

just hated the story so copypasted

god_man_69420:i know
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