Review Detail of William_Litsch in God of Tricksters
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I don't want to discourage writers, but the English language translation is bad enough that I am confused half the time about who did what. I wouldn't drop the story from that alone, but the plot holes just keep coming. Every chapter brings with it more plot holes. He's in high school and he's lived in the world his whole life supposedly, but no one recognizes him except bullies. No friends, no teachers, no family, no sense, no skills. It's like he was literally born yesterday. This leads to an avalanche of annoying plot holes. The world building, therefore makes no sense. Then the tropes start: bully becomes friend, waifu becomes interested in total weakling for no reason. I had to stop because nothing followed logically from anything.
God of Tricksters
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You could say the world building is a “trickster” haha I know its not funny but thats the first thing I thought of from this review. It seems like the logic is playing tricks on the readers. Therefore it makes sense that the world building doesn’t make sense. Not only is MC supposed to be a trickster the logic in the novel is too. Of course this is just the perspective of someone who hasn’t even read a single word of this novel yet.
Well I have to say, some of you people are really picky. Not everyone is a perfect english speaker. Your so called "Plotholes" are called world building. Not everything makes sense (yet) and will eventually be brought up in the Story. And lets be honest YOU as an individual, are you known in the world? Are you in the middle of attention in your classes, in your village? People do not know you. Most people do not care about you. If you are a weak link in the society (being bad at school, or not socially active) you will be ignored by people. So our MC in this story is exactly that. A weak link in the society. People do not care about him. Thats why nobody knows about him. If you would have read enough chapters you would also know why. The story has a slow start. I give you that, but most stories have slow starts. (Sorry for the length, but it had to be said)
Let me remind you We Are paying money here So he could at least get An editor or someone who reads a lot of english novels to take a look at his work
BattleGodWodan:Well I have to say, some of you people are really picky. Not everyone is a perfect english speaker. Your so called "Plotholes" are called world building. Not everything makes sense (yet) and will eventually be brought up in the Story. And lets be honest YOU as an individual, are you known in the world? Are you in the middle of attention in your classes, in your village? People do not know you. Most people do not care about you. If you are a weak link in the society (being bad at school, or not socially active) you will be ignored by people. So our MC in this story is exactly that. A weak link in the society. People do not care about him. Thats why nobody knows about him. If you would have read enough chapters you would also know why. The story has a slow start. I give you that, but most stories have slow starts. (Sorry for the length, but it had to be said)
Yeah true, but have you even read the novel? Sure the english isn't C2 grade, but it is not that bad. Some small mistakes, every person does. Look at the big Novels. Even they have some grammar mistakes, especially in the early chapters. The English does get better in the novel, some Chapters get edited later on in case there were big mistakes. To adress your Problem: Yes we pay money, yes we want perfect english, yes we want a story without plotholes and surely I would also love it for free. Now can you tell me where such a story/novel exists? Because I would like to read that. I read quite a lot and have not found wuch a story that wasn't published as book versions where multiple editors read over. You can btw read most of the chapters from novels for free if you use your FastPass everyday and buy the extras with points.
TheTrickster12:Let me remind you We Are paying money here So he could at least get An editor or someone who reads a lot of english novels to take a look at his work
Yes but if you are going to post a Novel in English, at least do the bare minimum and install Grammarly. It will literally make novels that are difficult to read to become at least passable.
BattleGodWodan:Well I have to say, some of you people are really picky. Not everyone is a perfect english speaker. Your so called "Plotholes" are called world building. Not everything makes sense (yet) and will eventually be brought up in the Story. And lets be honest YOU as an individual, are you known in the world? Are you in the middle of attention in your classes, in your village? People do not know you. Most people do not care about you. If you are a weak link in the society (being bad at school, or not socially active) you will be ignored by people. So our MC in this story is exactly that. A weak link in the society. People do not care about him. Thats why nobody knows about him. If you would have read enough chapters you would also know why. The story has a slow start. I give you that, but most stories have slow starts. (Sorry for the length, but it had to be said)
Yeah and I would say it really is passable in the early chapters and it really gets good in the later chapters he is improving every chapter.
Silent_But_Dudley:Yes but if you are going to post a Novel in English, at least do the bare minimum and install Grammarly. It will literally make novels that are difficult to read to become at least passable.
