Review Detail of A_lucid_Dreamer in My Alpha System

This story is great and I think is a Hidden gem. I Like your style of writing but it can be hard to follow. your style is written like a comic boom script Or a play .The problem Is you never know who’s talk. So i think You should put Character Name thEn what their saying. Exp. : Anne: I loVe pasta Anne’s mother: you get thaT from me i love Pasta Too. Narrator: and they lived happily Ever after. Something like thaT could be game changer for your noVel