Review Detail of Mel_Aniv in Lucid Dream Server
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I have no problem with the story quality. It is interesting for me and I can see the passion of the writer. My advice are to not overly use commas in one sentence. Maybe lessen them by making it to another sentence. I also want to suggest to change your dialogues into this "You are amazing," He said in a low voice. (if it was an active convo) but use "You are amazing." He said in a low voice. (If it is the end of convo). Well, good luck! Your novel will reach its success as I see the potential! Kudos! 👍 peace ✌️ I don't want to be critical though......Have a nice day!
Lucid Dream Server
DaisukiDayoSenpai
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Thanks for the review ^-^ I really appreciate you pointing out one of my weaknesses and I'm working on it. I don't know why but for some reason, my writing, and also my speaking tends to default to passive sentences. Of course, I'm working on it. As for overly using commas, do you mean using run-on sentences? I will keep that in mind. Once again, thank you so much and have a great day. I will leave a review for you soon :)
Thanks! I made my honest review but I am happy that you took it nicely. I am anxious about what my review will affect the author. Your story is nice but I want it nicer with few edits. Glad you liked my advice! 😉
DaisukiDayoSenpai:Thanks for the review ^-^ I really appreciate you pointing out one of my weaknesses and I'm working on it. I don't know why but for some reason, my writing, and also my speaking tends to default to passive sentences. Of course, I'm working on it. As for overly using commas, do you mean using run-on sentences? I will keep that in mind. Once again, thank you so much and have a great day. I will leave a review for you soon :)
Mel_Aniv:Thanks! I made my honest review but I am happy that you took it nicely. I am anxious about what my review will affect the author. Your story is nice but I want it nicer with few edits. Glad you liked my advice! 😉
DaisukiDayoSenpai:Bro.... pilipino ka rin pala ahaha. Salamat men, and good luck saten sa spirity ^-^
DaisukiDayoSenpai:Bro.... pilipino ka rin pala ahaha. Salamat men, and good luck saten sa spirity ^-^
