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Kayastor
KayastorLv113yr
2021-07-14 04:32

Everything is incredibly vague. By the time i got to chapter 10 I had no idea what was happening, who was talking, and where anyone was. We see the mc Find people, well kinda because he only see them talking. now by chapter 10 i dont even know if the mc is with them or talking to them or following them or even if they know hes there or not. Everything else seems fine but i cant read it if i dont know what happening. so you need to work on that and if you have improved in later chapters you most definitely need to rewrite early chapters becuase i can guarantee that its a major turn off for a lot of people.

A Desireless Agelong Migrant

UtopianLegend
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I wholeheartedly thank you for letting me know your thoughts about my work. I will surely rewrite the earlier chapters and make necessary changes to convey the idea of the story to it's finest. Again, I thank you for pointing the defects so that I can improve the novel by a good extent.

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Kayastor
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That was the only major problem for me so i will probably read it when you fix that because i liked everything else

UtopianLegend:I wholeheartedly thank you for letting me know your thoughts about my work. I will surely rewrite the earlier chapters and make necessary changes to convey the idea of the story to it's finest. Again, I thank you for pointing the defects so that I can improve the novel by a good extent.
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