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Nr_Yet1208
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2021-05-16 19:27

The introduction was slow but the rest had decent pacing. The plot was interesting but there were some punctuation issues. It did read smoothly, so I won't complain too much.

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Blue_Pizza
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Thanks for reviewing! I've seen people comment that I info dump while world-building, but it's too late to change some of that now (I'll try to change in the future) I'll also check the punctuation again, but I would appreciate it if you point them out because I edit a chapter almost 5 times before publishing it and even if it means I'm reading through rose tinted glasses I really don't see the mistakes...

Nr_Yet1208
Nr_Yet1208Lv12

don't worry happens to me too. I'll re-read a few paragraphs and try to point some out

Blue_Pizza:Thanks for reviewing! I've seen people comment that I info dump while world-building, but it's too late to change some of that now (I'll try to change in the future) I'll also check the punctuation again, but I would appreciate it if you point them out because I edit a chapter almost 5 times before publishing it and even if it means I'm reading through rose tinted glasses I really don't see the mistakes...
Nr_Yet1208
Nr_Yet1208Lv12

so about the dashes.... on what are you writing? I mean, do you really need two for emphasis?

Blue_Pizza:Thanks for reviewing! I've seen people comment that I info dump while world-building, but it's too late to change some of that now (I'll try to change in the future) I'll also check the punctuation again, but I would appreciate it if you point them out because I edit a chapter almost 5 times before publishing it and even if it means I'm reading through rose tinted glasses I really don't see the mistakes...
Blue_Pizza
Blue_PizzaAuthor

Oh, it's supposed to be –, the long dash, but when I first started writing I couldn't find it on my keyboard. Now I've found it, so you'll notice the newer chapters use the long dash instead of two hyphens.

Nr_Yet1208:so about the dashes.... on what are you writing? I mean, do you really need two for emphasis?
Nr_Yet1208
Nr_Yet1208Lv12

okay, that makes sense

Blue_Pizza:Oh, it's supposed to be –, the long dash, but when I first started writing I couldn't find it on my keyboard. Now I've found it, so you'll notice the newer chapters use the long dash instead of two hyphens.
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