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Mel_Aniv
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2021-05-14 12:52

The world-building was so great that I got the chills. There is only one problem and that is the synopsis. To have such quality chaps but the synopsis that is not very hooking also plays a role. I saw that the author has a good grasp of the language as he was a native speaker. I am jealous of it as an author being meh in english. Story potential is high and I can see its success. Kudos! 😉

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Mel_Aniv
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Review swapper here author! Hope you check mine called "The Grandmaster Of All Job Class", please 🙏 😉 ❤️

Blue_Pizza
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Thank you for your review! To be honest, I was going for a mysterious vibe with the synopsis but ig I probably would've had better luck boiling water with ice. Looks like I'll be wracking my brain thinking of a synopsis again😅. I just added your book btw and will review it soon.

Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

Your synopsis is great! But it was too mysterious to the point that I didn't know what to expect to the novel. Your opening chap was hooking by the way! So it was balanced out. Nice! I will send my synopsis for you to get my point. 😉

Blue_Pizza:Thank you for your review! To be honest, I was going for a mysterious vibe with the synopsis but ig I probably would've had better luck boiling water with ice. Looks like I'll be wracking my brain thinking of a synopsis again😅. I just added your book btw and will review it soon.
Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

This is my example to the synopsis. Hope you get what I mean..... 😉 This is a story of a man in his wisest and his strongest. His name was Joan Emsworth. Having faced a situation in which he can't become young again, he was forced to transmigrate to continue the cycle of life. Having been the strongest human in his past life, he was able to fight off the God of Angels. They fought and he was able to turn into his friend instead. The God of Demons was angered by his valiant deeds. Having been the greatest obstacle in his plans. Now this story started when he transmigrated. Meeting his body's parents and has assimilated with the soul of the past owner itself. He was faced with a crisis that he became a beginner. Being back to square one, he started to cultivate and train again. Upon having a great time preparing for his school next year, everything went wrong and all was lost. Facing great trials to test his courage and his bravery. As time goes by, he was regaining his power and getting stronger. Even though he was improving himself, his enemies were not also something to be trifled with. Making him cry many times. Meet Joan's journey of happiness, sadness, crying, bravery, courage, feel dreadness, enjoy the journey of adventures, meet imperfections, meet exhilarating action scenes, and enjoy diverse job classes. Can he survive in this world? Can he do the task to save the world he resides in? Can he be strong enough to continue his journey?

Blue_Pizza:Thank you for your review! To be honest, I was going for a mysterious vibe with the synopsis but ig I probably would've had better luck boiling water with ice. Looks like I'll be wracking my brain thinking of a synopsis again😅. I just added your book btw and will review it soon.
Blue_Pizza
Blue_PizzaAuthor

Thanks again. And I understand: I gotta make the synopsis clearer and mention what the story is about. I'm working on it and will update it when I'm done :)

Mel_Aniv:Your synopsis is great! But it was too mysterious to the point that I didn't know what to expect to the novel. Your opening chap was hooking by the way! So it was balanced out. Nice! I will send my synopsis for you to get my point. 😉
Blue_Pizza
Blue_PizzaAuthor

Just updated the synopsis. Hopefully I balanced mystery with information this time.

Mel_Aniv:Your synopsis is great! But it was too mysterious to the point that I didn't know what to expect to the novel. Your opening chap was hooking by the way! So it was balanced out. Nice! I will send my synopsis for you to get my point. 😉
Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

Nice! 👍 Mysterious as well as thrilling to see what will happen next!

Blue_Pizza:Just updated the synopsis. Hopefully I balanced mystery with information this time.
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