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luckyblacksheep
luckyblacksheepLv133yr
2021-09-09 08:50

The story is good it's just that it's going downhill boring. There's so many technical explanation than the story progression. If you disect the chapter 86% of that is explanation then the remaining is the story development. Sometimes I think this is a technical book instead of a novel.I got so bored from reading this that I wrote this review of a pent up frustration to relieved me from ruining my day.

Primordial Dimensions

HideousGrain
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477 Chs

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Heavily overrated for how bad the grammar is, sure superb world building and character development, but if you have to read thrice the same phrase to understand what the author wants to say I can't give it a higher raiting. What's so hard to get an editor? You can find a half decent one for little to no money. I am sure the money made on the novel can cover for an editor. Well my opinion.

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