Review Detail of Sen_Yoshioka in Tale of a Phoenix

It's a nice story, the beginning is engaging, but I saw some punctuations in the first chapter. I noticed a sentence split into two. The sixteenth line should be something like; "After shutting the window and pulling up the curtains, she then cleaned the floor" Or you can leave the "then" out, whichever sounds better to you. After writing that, you can write in what she's cleaning with or you can say "After shutting the window and pulling the curtains closed, she whipped up the rain water that managed to get inside." Something like that. Remember to not put "And" at the beginning of a sentence or a paragraph.