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hideout22Lv103yr
2021-08-25 15:05

Okay, for the plot it has potential. I really like the story. But how the story develops feels like it is kinda dragging. There are some scenes that I find unnecessary for the story. And how the world is describe is a bit here and there. Like the author is still confuse on what ambiance he or she wants the readers to picture. Hope this review helps you improve your story. Btw I was already at chap 77 when I had enough. It is just so confusing for me. Hopefully you can polish this because the story is good but how it was executed is not. But hey there is still room for improvement.

The Curse Of The Evil Queen

Wateristubeg
4.8
156 Chs

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Wateristubeg
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Thank you for you review. I’ll try my best to improve and edit the story <33

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Verhygo
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I'd like to remind that this is entirely my own opinion and only based upon everything up to chapter 4. (Because there wasn't more published yet.) Writing Quality: There are some noticeable mistakes there, but nothing major. The descriptions and emotional display are great. Story Development: The story develops at a comfortable speed. With good insight on motivations and goals. Character Design: The evil queen is good established, her motivations are clear as well as her goal. She's not unlikable, but rather very reasonable. At least until now. The full extent of her evil side is not yet fully shown. Update stability: What's to say? The writer does still write, so good. I guess... World Background: No exposition dumps, the world is interesting and introduced naturally through dialog. Summary: An interesting concept, I am intrigued. It's very difficult to handle a anti hero or even villainous character while still keeping them relatable and interesting. I look forward to more chapters, to see if it works.

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Light_ray
Light_rayLv14

The author always surprises with her work. The character of the FL portrayed exuberantly. Just by the synopsis and a few chapters one can tell it will not only give you chills but also the excitement - what will happen next. All the best for Spirity, author-San.

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sky_maiden
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Just started reading this book. But I'm already hooked up. Fantasy Romance is ❤️❤️❤️. Will continue to support this book. Highly Recommended! 💯

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Ken_5osuke
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REVOLUTION GOES BRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!! I love the story. My nose went bleeding coz of the grammar... it's perfect... unlike mine... But anyway good luck to the cute author!!! Hope more chapters will come!

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THE_WORDSMITH
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I liked how the Author wrote Adrianne, the 'Evil Queen'. Her domineering attitude and unyielding will are suitable for a QUEEN. The other thing is how Abigail is completely the opposite of Adrianne. The two characters exist to add contrast and color to each other. Till now the development of the story is quite digestible. Good work, looking forward to furthering updates.

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Cherlyswan
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The feels, the chills, the story development, the characters, the curiosity. With just four chapters, this story has caught my heart and I'm sure it will catch yours too!! I highly recommend you make space for this in your library!!! All the best author-nim! I'm here to support you all the way!

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shrEk2o3
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5/5 because the author has outdone herself. The writing quality is amazing, I couldn't put the book down. As the story progresses, you get hooked wanting to know what happens next. Tbh, I want to fast forward it to the time when the evil queen regains her power. I love vampire stories and this novel has a unique plot twist. You can either love or hate Adrianne, but I hope she gets to have her revenge. Great job author-nim! 😍♥️

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