hideout22

Omgeee Vincent Van Hoff 🤣🤣🤣

Okay, for the plot it has potential. I really like the story. But how the story develops feels like it is kinda dragging. There are some scenes that I find unnecessary for the story. And how the world is describe is a bit here and there. Like the author is still confuse on what ambiance he or she wants the readers to picture. Hope this review helps you improve your story. Btw I was already at chap 77 when I had enough. It is just so confusing for me. Hopefully you can polish this because the story is good but how it was executed is not. But hey there is still room for improvement.

Wait two pairs? She has 4 eyes?

Okay the scene that the author wanted to show to the reader is destroyed with this paragraph or sentence. Why? Because the first part after the queen was captured the author already wanted the readers to picture a dark moody place for the scene. It was fist stated that there was thunder like the place is already engulf with darkness and the only light the people were getting is is from lightning but then there was the moon? Usually the moon portray clear sky. Now the mood is broken.