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TimVic
TimVicLv153yr
2021-04-07 04:12

Man this is some good stuff. The feels in the writing is spectacular, it will definitely pull you in. The storyline, the plot and characters all well written. Keep it up man.

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Gery_
Gery_Author

Watienla_Jamir
Watienla_JamirLv3

who is the love interest?

Unruh_
Unruh_Lv11

your dad

Watienla_Jamir:who is the love interest?
I_love_magic
I_love_magicLv10

Hey! Sorry to bother you but i would really like to know whether the MC will use his Earth/Modern knowledge in this story before i start reading. Because if the MC from our modern world only makes swords and other boring "artifacts" like that then i don't really think this is my cup of tea. Thanks for the answer in advance!

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Gery_
Gery_Author

Hi, he will use his knowledge from the past world, but not in a way where he influences the cultivation world.

I_love_magic:Hey! Sorry to bother you but i would really like to know whether the MC will use his Earth/Modern knowledge in this story before i start reading. Because if the MC from our modern world only makes swords and other boring "artifacts" like that then i don't really think this is my cup of tea. Thanks for the answer in advance!
Gery_
Gery_Author

However, he won't just create boring artifacts as he will fight and cultivate too, so you don't need to fear that part.😊

I_love_magic:Hey! Sorry to bother you but i would really like to know whether the MC will use his Earth/Modern knowledge in this story before i start reading. Because if the MC from our modern world only makes swords and other boring "artifacts" like that then i don't really think this is my cup of tea. Thanks for the answer in advance!
I_love_magic
I_love_magicLv10

I like artifact crafting and stuff like that... that is why i asked, but whatever. So, what you are saying is that in the end this will be relatively normal/typical xianxia and the MC will only use his Earth knowledge to cultivate, right? So, no technology or kingdom building? Thanks for the answers!

Gery_:However, he won't just create boring artifacts as he will fight and cultivate too, so you don't need to fear that part.😊
ChaosAsura0
ChaosAsura0Lv2

Is this a harem author or just 1fml. Judging by the mc behaviour and the way he treats the fml and other I’m assuming it’s 1fml. He just doesn’t seem interested in other girls no matter how beautiful tbh

Gery_:However, he won't just create boring artifacts as he will fight and cultivate too, so you don't need to fear that part.😊
Gery_
Gery_Author

It is 1fml indeed😄

ChaosAsura0:Is this a harem author or just 1fml. Judging by the mc behaviour and the way he treats the fml and other I’m assuming it’s 1fml. He just doesn’t seem interested in other girls no matter how beautiful tbh
Aung_Kaung_Myat_4789
Aung_Kaung_Myat_4789Lv3

Number Doesn't Matter. For True Love Can't Be Counted. No Matter How Many Times I Shouted That Love Can't Be Mounted. By Some Sort Of Plotline That Will Make The Story Less Desired. No One Seems To Care Although The Truth Is Shown Out Bare. They Will Never Be Aware That Love Can't Be Restricted To One Girl. Out In The Heaven Where Mortals Couldn't Fathom. God Gives His Love For Free This Is The Closest Example You Shall See. So Spread Your Love For Everyone For That Is The Duty Of A True Man. -an original love poem by me:3

Gery_:It is 1fml indeed😄
GreatDaoofspace
GreatDaoofspaceLv15

Romance? Harem?

Monarchofchaos
MonarchofchaosLv2

Few😅 Im glad its 1 fml. i hope you stick to that author. There are a few authors who sometimes change half way. i hope its not the Case.

Gery_:It is 1fml indeed😄
Monarchofchaos
MonarchofchaosLv2

What kind on non sense is this

Aung_Kaung_Myat_4789:Number Doesn't Matter. For True Love Can't Be Counted. No Matter How Many Times I Shouted That Love Can't Be Mounted. By Some Sort Of Plotline That Will Make The Story Less Desired. No One Seems To Care Although The Truth Is Shown Out Bare. They Will Never Be Aware That Love Can't Be Restricted To One Girl. Out In The Heaven Where Mortals Couldn't Fathom. God Gives His Love For Free This Is The Closest Example You Shall See. So Spread Your Love For Everyone For That Is The Duty Of A True Man. -an original love poem by me:3
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MadHatter0_o
MadHatter0_oLv3

Considering this story has barely started, I think it will be safe to say that it is NOT a review more of a wish letter. So, this is my personal opinion which is heavily biased. I hope this will be of some help to the author. I also want to say that I am a current reader of the author's other work "Journey of a legend". I might compare certain aspects of this work's writing style to that as this work is heavily unfinished. Concept: It's a very interesting and, as I have not read anything like that before, unique concept. Cultivating using artifacts that are apparently only used for making jewelry. This has a lot of scopes to introduce new things. I am very eager to see how things unfold as chapters come out. I will say that if the cultivation is half as good as "journey of a legend" then it will be awesome. But looking at the auxiliary chapter it seems this system will more than a match for that. The separation of realms and each realm with their unique rules and worlds is very intriguing too. In short, conception-wise, this work is phenomenal. Story: Amazing prologue. I really loved it and it easily catches attention. It was dark and gritty but at the same time deep. And I love the fact that you left some part to the reader's imagination and make them rationalize why Cal did what he did. I am eager to see how you develop the story. Whether you give Cal and Khal parallel life or it is something else. Characters: There aren't many characters introduced yet to talk about them. One thing I liked is that you gave a brief description of the characters' appearance (MC excluded). If possible try to include personality traits in them(Like, instead of saying brown eyes, say brown eye full of mischief). It helps to know them more and visualize easily. But this is my personal opinion so feel free to ignore it. However, I would like to state 2 major things about MC and his love interest. The prologue gives the idea of a dark MC. So, either we get a dark MC or a moderate one with extensive character development. If you suddenly change the MC's attitude without proper development it throws off the readers. I feel the need to mention this because this has already happened(in the trial). His reaction after the scuffle with that young master does not complement his backstory at all and it threw me off. Secondly, as it is a non-harem novel and unless you are planning to give us a major plot twist we already have the love interest. The issue with introducing a love interest this early is that you need to give the character the same amount of care as MC. I really like to have her a great first impression and proper development. I will just say that I would rather not have another Emma in terms of initial introduction [img=recommend]. As for world development, character development, there is no point in saying about it now. And, as for writing style and spelling mistakes, it has significantly improved in this work. so not much there to say about it. I wish you good luck with your work and looking forward to future chapters. I hope it's as good, if not better, as your other work. Thank you for your hard work. Keep it up!

NoWoRRyMaN
NoWoRRyMaNLv14
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