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Augustine_Pasin
Augustine_PasinLv124yr
2021-03-30 06:46

Funny concept but i have a hard time seeing how it could be fleshed put into a comlete story. it seems like a little too limiting.[img=faceslap]

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InevitableTruth
InevitableTruthLv1

Pretty sure it is a complete story? This is translation, not the story being written so what are you on about?

Augustine_Pasin
Augustine_PasinLv12

An maybe I misunderstood, i thought this was for green lighting projects not green lighting translations. Either way, I don’t think the concept has much potential unless it’s only a minor part of the overarching plot.

Happy_AltRight
Happy_AltRightLv2

why use that disgusting emote

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LightningCatThief
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I really liked the first 20 chapters, but Story changed completely later and not in a God way. That is probably the reason why the chapters are released so slowly. The first part of the story is a fun variation of the Check-In system genre with a sprinkle of slice of life family time. This part is interesting and well written. But as soon as the real plot of the novel starts everything goes wrong. The MC becomes a stone cold mass murder, which might ve justified, but his relaxed and jovial personality gets completely replaced in the favor of a cardboard cutout of a general of slaughter and iron discipline. The sudden character change and really a change of genre is jarring and frankly not warranted. You can't learn formations in a day. You can't combine multiple strong and independent personalities into a unit in a day and most of all, you can't win people's hearts and their support by slaughter them. Fear is not a God motivator and a hindrance to build trust in yourself and your words. It honestly would have been better if the author just skipped all of the details, he got quite a few wrong as well, and continued with the happy go lucky storyline by making the MC quip about his new work assignment for a little bit, while he did his best to get some kind of ordern into that organization. Also, the formations he uses are completely worthless for this type of combat. There is sadly no human equivalent in history, but if I had to guess I would have probably chosen European small team formation designed for peasants to fight fully armored knights on horseback head on. And even those are really not that great of a comparison, because cultivators are not just simply faster, stronger and near invulnerable. No they also have faster reaction time, better mobility and better senses. If a knight could see well in his thick helmet, then the helmet was badly made and an easy weakness to exploit, while the horses charge was often to fast to react to changes. Cultivators should not have those problems and therefore need different formations.

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