Review Detail of Kaitlyn_Cats in Dimensional Store System In Apocalypse

read some chapters, not nearly as many as others, im around ch 14, so far its really good, some issues i have though are when hes in the "apocalypse" his aim is perfect everytime, perfect headshot, except for the times when he isnt "calm", im sorry but this guy who's never shot a gun in his life, nor could even afford one, is now shooting shots as if hes a seasoned veteran? the story and stuff is great but that one point kept bothering me while reading. the character design, im not really sure, i dont remember getting any description about what he looks like, since stein is technically also a character, theres little described about it as well, the only description i got from that was a broken crystal when he stepped on it, and then the voice in his head. so the technology behind that is kinda just skipped and leaves you wondering how that works. which leads to the world background, which is just meh, bland basically, the apocalypse world has holes in it. its said that they had pretty amazing technology, and seeing as how this thing he has can take him to his world and to the apocalypse world, why cant it do the same to the survivors mentioned in the apocalypse? why not move them back and forth? if they had this technology, why did it need to go and find help from another world, and what would it accomplish by only getting a single person? the writing quality is ok, lots of word mistakes, past tense and present tense words being used, the POV changes with the wording and its just confusing, you should definitely look into getting an editor.. its readable but still clumsy at best.