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2021-05-25 08:57

alright let start with how the story got couple chapters that people hate like back home final two chapter till this day I hate them and the fact mc just thick up his face and take the blame was what made people rage out the story is not bad but just some chapter would make people drop the story and you might not care but some of your fans want the fic to reach some where and chapters like those kill the story and reading vybz but I'm enjoying your work just some chapter makes me wonder

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While normaly i cant be bothered writing negative reviews however for this story i will make a exception since i realy like the anime and novels used in this fanfic but absolutely HATE everything else so this is just for a small hope that maby the author will give the MC significant character development(have him possesed by a ghost and completely wipe his personality or something similiar) and at the same time to vent my frustrations with what would otherwise be a good story in my eyes. Now, the story started off great, a very interesting idea, great worlds, great characters and the mc felt his crisis of being killed in the near future so it would make for a great plot reason to become stronger. But... the MCs personality is absolutely the worst ive seen in recent times in the more populiar stories on webnovel. The MC can be summed up as a chinese Issei Hyoudou for those who have seen/read Highschool DXD, meaning that while he is not some kind of "hero of justice" type hes extremely stupid and completely loses his mind whenever he sees anything female. The MCs behaviour is extremely disgusting and reading about his actions and inner toughts is basicly a carbon coppy of Issei wich should make anyone puke but somehow all the girls simply fall in love with him on the spot for no reason at all while the MC only gets more and more perverted but doesnt dare to take that last step. Then we have the MCs extreme unlogical greed for money, i mean hes part of the richest family in the country but instead of strenghtening himself with the chat group he only cares about selling things for gold, i mean seriously, hes in a bloody cultivation world where gold is worth completely nothing and everythign is all about treasures artifacts weapons skills and medicines etc, but instead of using those kind of things to make himself stronger he only sells them for gold he simply doesnt need at all. Now the most frustrating part of the MC is that after he got rank 9 and stopped feeling the threat of death from the plot the mc simply gave up all ambitions of becomming stronger, he already didnt care about anything but raw cultivation base before this but after he simply didnt care about anything but chasing his own perversions. He has countless of points to buy supreme skills weapons or medicine to improve his cultivation but he simply doesnt care, almost every chapter the MC says things like "oh if only i had a skill i could do this" or "oh i dont have any skill so im actualy a fake expert with much lower combat power than someone at the same level" or "oh my spear is only a ordinary spear so it breaks too easy"... wich could literaly be solved by a click of a button in the chat group store or by simply getting a skill from one of the worlds he has access to but he just completely ignores it instead prefers to sell those things for gold only wich he doesnt use. Even worse is that he actualy got a powerful technique from killing a enemy called banishing shift, wich is the golden finger of the MC in that world, but because he doesnt understand it instantly he simply pretends it doesnt exist and ignores it instead of training like everybody else... The worst of the story is that the Author is obviously trying his best to write this story, the ideas are great, the writing quality is excelent and the updates are constant. So it is extremely obvious that the MC acts like that because the Author wants him to and not because the Author doesnt know how to write or anything like that. I just cant fathom why you would write such a obnoxious japanese beta MC and also constantly make him out to have a negative IQ by repeating those things i wrote above...

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