Review Detail of Divine_univers in [(Error Unknown) System]
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honestly this story for me is more of a personal preference thing, as I absolutely despise stories that have the mc being fanned out at an extremely young age, like the amount of stuff he's doing at like what the age of 4? is so unrealistic regardless of having a system which by the way sucks so far. Also side characters just feel weird so far due to how much they expect of him despite how young he is. and seeing the disappointed reactions of side characters over things the mc can't control is off putting, lastly the kingdom building and world building has been really lack luster, as the servants said they would set up the province for their young master for when he's older yet so far 200 chapters in it feels like zero progress has been made at least to me. Besides that the writing quality itself is above average and the plot itself is a good concept just doesn't feel well executed
[(Error Unknown) System]
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I really like this review since I absolutely agree with your first statement. This story is more of a personal preference thing. To be honest, I wrote this novel out of frustration that novels had MC's that replied too much on the System and not their own skills and training. By showing the System can be corrupted and less than helpful, at times other MCs would be close to God-hood by chapter 30. Regarding the age, that relates to my personal annoyance when the novel would see a transmigrated person enter the body of a fully fleshed out person in another world, only for their personality to do a 180. This is also done in regards to his first Ark which needs a young and rash Benedict who thinks he can lead his family, but unaware many different undercurrents are occurring far beyond his control or knowledge. I wanted Benedict to be a proactive child those unstable spirit and mentality made him seem a little out of place in the world but not overall. That's why other children characters are explained to be working or doing tasks to keep themselves alive and learning while they move around Alynthn. Regards to the servants and worldbuilding, that's mainly down to the MC not leaving the city or region. The servants aren't all fleshed out as I would have liked or hoped but I think their direction going forward will improve. Either way, thanks for the review and your comments. I'll definitely take them on board with my editing process (even if im taking a while) Still can't believe my first novel has even reached 700,000 plus words so I'm happy to hear. If you want to talk more about this or have any ideas about areas to enhance the reading experience for you and others, please contact me either by replying or Discord! I'm always happy for a chat.