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AbysallNight
AbysallNightLv142yr
2022-06-01 02:24

A good read and a good writer. Overall its an amazing book, the interactions are great, amazing characters - Looking foward to Ganyu & Lumi joining the harem amd in the interactions, its nice and dun to read. My negative points are Yomite the mc, he needs to organise himself, I understand the want to enjoy himself but he has minimal if none at all in terms of power to protect or claim what he wants and his girls. He also seems to not know how to set order, he allows those around him to do as they wish going against what he wishes to do and his weak will in following through and things he says to show respect for those he cares. He also seems pretty self-absorbed. Not throwing shade at the writer its engaging, it's just the Mc who is the centre point goes from being bearable to being dislike-able, he doesn't use his abilities at all really or at least in a semi- intelligent way. Also there's he doesn't really read into the fact that the goddess who sent him obviously has some dodgy motives in addition to the fact that she's obviously significantly stronger than everyone on the Plane he is. Sorry for the rant I wanted to make a genuine review but is what it is. I hope all is well and the book isn't dropped.

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What can I say? Amazing could be the only word to describe this fan fic... There's so many things to point out that makes this a worthwhile read let me list a few of them... -An original MC with zero knowledge about the world itself. This is a rare find in fanfiction and I have no doubt this is a great decision. Since the interactions with MC and his learning of the world and it's norm is very enjoyable and with it we see characters get more fleshed out as MC learns more about them through interactions, gives it that realistic feeling that most fanfictions in this platform fail to display. -Dope powers. Yomite's powers are really interesting and adds new dimensions to the story. The Tempus of Particles is a very rarely seen powerup, since it's like Onoki's kekkei toutum in Naruto, a very underappreciated ability, it's really OP and can practically disintegrate anything it's locked on, Tempus of the Story and Tempus of the Heart aren't really explained as of yet but I can already see great potential in them so I like how this is going. -The world of Genshin. Honestly, I haven't played the game but I've researched it, and from their I've come to love this world and it's story, knowing gacha games I have no doubt this will take a depressing turn but I hope it would all wind up to a great ending and this fanfic would be able to uphold it if not surpass it, with the author who is backing it I have no doubt it has that surpassing potential. -The Characters and how they are portrayed. This is by far the greatest feature of the ff. The characters feel alive and complement their og counterpart perfectly. The dialogues, the interactions, their individual gestures, behaviors, body language, each itty bitty details are handled carefully to make them individualistic and have their own style. I can easily read a speech and tell which character it is describing, it's honestly astonishing, at this point, how the author has portrayed them. I love it and hope he can be consistent with it. Some things that may need some improvements... -The writing. For the most part it's phenomenal writing if compared to most fanfics on this platform. There's little to no mistakes bit there's always the occasional misspellings, also sometimes the words and sentences feels a bit jumbled, past and present sentences are mixed and a bit weird to see one paragraph be past and the other be present. Quite possibly it can be because I have not seen any writings of this style so the author maybe right and me wrong. what's definite is that, this in no way breaks or disrupts the reader experience so hurray to that. Well, that's all, hope this review helps you in gathering some readers aki and this review, although obviously biased, upholds what I genuinely feel about this fic.. Waiting for dem smuts, fluffs and the journey to relations you've promised us... Don't keep us waiting fam, hope this ff doesn't die like the old ones because of retards and I appeal to the WN to pls not ban him again, the man is old he can't take another shock like this.. Aki doesn't want a 4th time spare the guy plz....

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