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PinguGod_
PinguGod_Lv53yr
2021-04-17 23:43

So. Before reading this fanfic I should warn you. This fanfic contains actual words so be careful. Now onto the review. I lied.

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hezjz
hezjzLv4

i trusted you and you betry me like this

iTride
iTrideLv6

i copy and pasted this in a txt.file and theres actually a hidden review! I was surprised!

labrat1
labrat1Lv4

iTride:i copy and pasted this in a txt.file and theres actually a hidden review! I was surprised!
HiatusAuthorEuclid
HiatusAuthorEuclidLv4

My trust in you has reached rock bottom

Poison_Tester
Poison_TesterLv4

Wait fr?

iTride:i copy and pasted this in a txt.file and theres actually a hidden review! I was surprised!
PALI_
PALI_Lv4

yes

Poison_Tester:Wait fr?
sh8tyy
sh8tyyLv4

I'll never forget this betrayal

Primordial_Two
Primordial_TwoLv5

EtherealSoulScythe
EtherealSoulScytheLv13

bigroy6732
bigroy6732Lv4

Tatsuya_kun
Tatsuya_kunLv3

top 10 anime betrayals :<

OriginStory
OriginStoryLv3

hydrocyanic_acid
hydrocyanic_acidLv13

nah he messing with you

Poison_Tester:Wait fr?
RuffyRaph
RuffyRaphLv4

CaveSquirrel
CaveSquirrelLv4

Is this it?

PALI_:yes
Willex_Void
Willex_VoidLv4

godly comment . still waiting for the review 🤓

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Lonely_Paradox
Lonely_ParadoxLv4

What can I say? Amazing could be the only word to describe this fan fic... There's so many things to point out that makes this a worthwhile read let me list a few of them... -An original MC with zero knowledge about the world itself. This is a rare find in fanfiction and I have no doubt this is a great decision. Since the interactions with MC and his learning of the world and it's norm is very enjoyable and with it we see characters get more fleshed out as MC learns more about them through interactions, gives it that realistic feeling that most fanfictions in this platform fail to display. -Dope powers. Yomite's powers are really interesting and adds new dimensions to the story. The Tempus of Particles is a very rarely seen powerup, since it's like Onoki's kekkei toutum in Naruto, a very underappreciated ability, it's really OP and can practically disintegrate anything it's locked on, Tempus of the Story and Tempus of the Heart aren't really explained as of yet but I can already see great potential in them so I like how this is going. -The world of Genshin. Honestly, I haven't played the game but I've researched it, and from their I've come to love this world and it's story, knowing gacha games I have no doubt this will take a depressing turn but I hope it would all wind up to a great ending and this fanfic would be able to uphold it if not surpass it, with the author who is backing it I have no doubt it has that surpassing potential. -The Characters and how they are portrayed. This is by far the greatest feature of the ff. The characters feel alive and complement their og counterpart perfectly. The dialogues, the interactions, their individual gestures, behaviors, body language, each itty bitty details are handled carefully to make them individualistic and have their own style. I can easily read a speech and tell which character it is describing, it's honestly astonishing, at this point, how the author has portrayed them. I love it and hope he can be consistent with it. Some things that may need some improvements... -The writing. For the most part it's phenomenal writing if compared to most fanfics on this platform. There's little to no mistakes bit there's always the occasional misspellings, also sometimes the words and sentences feels a bit jumbled, past and present sentences are mixed and a bit weird to see one paragraph be past and the other be present. Quite possibly it can be because I have not seen any writings of this style so the author maybe right and me wrong. what's definite is that, this in no way breaks or disrupts the reader experience so hurray to that. Well, that's all, hope this review helps you in gathering some readers aki and this review, although obviously biased, upholds what I genuinely feel about this fic.. Waiting for dem smuts, fluffs and the journey to relations you've promised us... Don't keep us waiting fam, hope this ff doesn't die like the old ones because of retards and I appeal to the WN to pls not ban him again, the man is old he can't take another shock like this.. Aki doesn't want a 4th time spare the guy plz....

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