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Figil
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2022-03-10 19:44

I like the story, but the action is too slow. A typical case is a one-day test in the novel, but the author describes it in more than 40 chapters. Slow character development, unnecessary reflection and repetition.

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PurpleSpring
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Thanks for the review! Also felt like it was dragged on for way too long and almost caused me to stop writing... Don't plan to have something drag on for that long again, as it also makes it boring to write for me!

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