Review Detail of goldenchild725 in The forbidden fruit
Review detail
It's a good story. It's not quite my cup of tea though. Translation Quality: The quality needs work. You have a lot of punctuation and grammar mistakes. Stability of Updates: I have nothing to say here. Story Development: I don't quite understand what the point of the prologue was. The rest of the story development seems good though. Character Design: Seems alright. I couldn't immerse myself in the characters. They seemed a little...flat. World Background: Nothing to say here.
The forbidden fruit
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Although I couldn't understand why you did it, doesn't mean I didn't like it. As a Christian, it's nice to see someone using the Bible in such a way.
calfikydra:Thank you so much for your honest review, i really appreciate it :) There's a meaning behind the prologue, that will make sense later in the book, but i guess it's not for everyone, which is totally fine!
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goldenchild725:Although I couldn't understand why you did it, doesn't mean I didn't like it. As a Christian, it's nice to see someone using the Bible in such a way.