Honest review here for ya. Your story has a good basis and a lot of potential to work with. Main detracting points are just repetitve use of vocabulary and sentence structure can be a little abrupt, choppy. One thing that I noticed you do really well is remembering to describe things in detail. Letting your reader understand what you are potraying is key in a good story, so props to you for that. Character design is alright so far, but I would say that his emotions could be a little more erratic at the beginning. Even if you wanted to stick to a more calculative feeling because he's a robot, you could have a clash of his previous emotions to his logical robotic side. World background also looks good and seems to have a lot of directions to take the story. Keep up the good work author!
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