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CalypsoDay
CalypsoDayLv14yr
2021-03-04 18:23

The respawn system, the madness, the soul collecting, the dungeon feel, the monsters - they all give me such a "Bloodborne"/"Dark Souls". vibe. And I love that! This vibe is further perpetuated by the fact that the protagonist has no idea how that world works, so he has to guess certain things. He just feels so lost! Even the fact that there's an altar teleporting him around sends me back to those games. The only thing I would change... I would like the story to be a little darker, some jokes seem to spoil the general mood. I think the story would be fantastic with a more serious and grim tone! Overall, good job!

Death before the Beginning (On Hiatus+Due for Rewrite)

YoanRoturier
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YoanRoturier
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Thanks! I'll take that into account :)

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“A man must not be without shame, for the shame of being without shame is shamelessness indeed.” – Mencius Therefore even if it is shameful, I am giving myself 5 stars! By the way, if you liked my book or any other books on this website, don't forget to leave reviews. It seriously helps us improve our writing style and the quality of our work. USUAL AUTHOR SPEECH ALERT: Of course, don't forget to smash down that powerstone button (don't destroy your mouse please) if you liked my book. Don't forget to keep it in your collection ;). It's also good to know what you guys think of us. Good or... less-good opinions are welcomed. Keep it constructive tho. For me, keeping a close look at what you think is only second to my outline. It also helps with the motivation and blah blah blah blah... Until next time, Fallens.

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GWEN
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I haven't read one chapter, but your synopsis is absolutely hilarious 😂🤣🤣 I did read to the end and what you said totally rocks! Your book must be the best of the best with attitude like that! Fighting!

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Redink_109
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First impression for your first chapter was amazing.. The naration sure detail, i can imagine the place, how Chara dresses. The story PLot anti mainstream.. This is good story! I recommended for you all, have a good work!

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Aeipathy_02
Aeipathy_02Lv11

I have quite a few laughs here. First, there are few typos but don't really hinder me to read. Story development flows well. It is not too fast-paced and just right. Character design. I say the male lead has quite got a funny personality. The other characters too are quite good. World background. It is set in a dungeon. And the author crafted it well, including the items and skills. Overall a great read already. Keep it up, author!

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The_Laboratory
The_LaboratoryLv1

From what I've read so far, this story seems to be a very well written and promising start for a new author. I'd recommend you read this if you like fantasy, and are a stickler for proper grammar in your webnovels, but also just of you like rich worldbuilding and original takes on a few character archetypes. Sorry if this review is incoherent, but it's the best I've got in me currently.

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Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

The author's narration was grand and superb! I am quite jealous right now! If I can copy his skills, then I will rise from the ashes and conquer the world of novels! Huhahaha! BTW, Your story is unique and the attack to the genre was not common. An amazing piece of art! Good job!

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Nancy_Jim
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Totally deserving of a five star if not more. Zero to none grammar errors. Updating stability excellent. I love the background transition of this story. It is clear that the author took out time to gather his thoughts. I can say that this is one of the best books that I have read on WN. Hey guys! When you check this out, remember to vote, drop comments, reviews, share and gift the author. This is truly amazing. Please don't drop, your story got me trapped TOTALLY.

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Woah! Fellow author. Your book is hooking from start. I love bg, plot, and scenario. Dark Fantasy is one of my favorite genres. Hope your work be a mass hit in the future. Fighting!

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TofSpades
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This story is a true work of art. The plot is very unique and different to the things I've read in the past. Anything can happen, so the readers are always at the edge of their seats. Great work Author!

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uhjuihoijio
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A funny take of the levelling genre. The MC made me laugh. I thought the world was well built and a lot went into building it. The story had a good pace and was easy to read. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.

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