I have seen this on a russian website yet you havent given any credit to the original creator not to mention the fact that your not telling anybody that this has been translated care to explain

The question that needs to be asked, is who is in the Harem? This will either take your Fanfic to the promise land... Or goes trait in the bin like the other Naruto fanfics that don't have Hinata but Sakura. Before people comment on this and say, But what about Naruto! IDGAF about the typical Protagonist, all he does is talk about Friendship with his stupid idea of solving peace without fighting! Pain and Madara plan forcing peace makes wayyy more sense. So for ranting, but I like everything your doing, just try quicken the story until he gets to being a Genin. Also never seen A shikamaru fanfic, man deserves his credit.

Will there be R-18 ?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????

The story is well written, but to me it is just another bloodline hoarding fic with the same bloodlines as always. I honestly hoped to see him do something cool as shikamaru, but basically hes doing everything to not be a version of Shikamaru... So yea, well written good story, but could do with a more original take on the gaming system thrope

Author legit just translated this from somewhere and doesn’t fix the atrocious writing that comes with only translating something. I would recommend to not reading if you can speak gibberish

Harem in the Tag Approved..

imma need the sauce of the cover for research purposes. yeah definitely research purposes.... ......................................................

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I think your writing is good and the story makes sense. For my taste, there are too many thoughts about what he can buy from the system, be it techniques, bloodlines or information about quests. As I see it, 50% of the story is just him thinking about the system. That's kind of boring.

never wite a novel in english ever again its literally unreadable. the quality of writing is the same as my 5 year old cousin filler filler