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NerdyBookworm_
NerdyBookworm_Lv143yr
2021-07-03 05:48

I honestly don't know how there are so many good reviews on here. The grammar is awful, something I thought I would read past as there are some books that don't have amazing grammar but a good story line. But this made it very difficult to follow in some places, making me re read to see what character is speaking. The first couple of chapters basically repeat the synopsis of who each character is. It jumps from ML and FL pov but it just repeats what happens between them (which would have been fine I suppose IF it didn't just repeat using the same exact words what happened. So its just re reading what the previous chapter has been put except for their different days being the only difference) There are times that made me wonder if the author did research into the mafia world because from what I'd read (i think I made it to chapter 12) there weren't even 'soldiers' to do their dirty work. But anyway I don't want to keep ranting as I'm sure you will read it for yourselves.. but what threw me completely off from the story .. AFTER READING REVIEWS OF HOW REALISTIC THE STORY IS: Was how she suddenly felt she loved him. After one date .. a month apart of not seeing each other, the only thing he had been doing for such a 'possessive' man was texting and calling her in that time. But yeah that's my review. update stability .. well it's completed book. world background - yeah it's got the basics. All in all.. very disappointed

A Possessive Mafia Leader

4Maggievasiredz
4.7
51 Chs

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Megana4
Megana4Lv2

Thank you for the feedback, dear. I will consider your suggestion and fix it.

3yr
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Lizbella
LizbellaLv13

Hmmmmm Did you even cross check your work before posting? You are writing about awful grammar but ended up hitting yourself. What do you mean by"so many good reviews on here"? You need to have a little wisdom human.

2yr
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NerdyBookworm_
NerdyBookworm_Lv14

No because I'm not a writer or editor but this was hard to follow

Lizbella:Hmmmmm Did you even cross check your work before posting? You are writing about awful grammar but ended up hitting yourself. What do you mean by"so many good reviews on here"? You need to have a little wisdom human.
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2yr
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Lizbella
LizbellaLv13

Okay. Am also so sorry for my reply. Writing a novel is not so easy. I know you are being truthful but I'd advise that we should take precautions not to hurt the next person with our wiriteups

NerdyBookworm_:No because I'm not a writer or editor but this was hard to follow
2yr
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NerdyBookworm_
NerdyBookworm_Lv14

This is true and I feel bad for my tone. But I think a truthful review was needed on here as there seems to be many that misled me and probably many other readers

Lizbella:Okay. Am also so sorry for my reply. Writing a novel is not so easy. I know you are being truthful but I'd advise that we should take precautions not to hurt the next person with our wiriteups
2yr
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Lizbella
LizbellaLv13

Okay. Can you give my book a try?

NerdyBookworm_:This is true and I feel bad for my tone. But I think a truthful review was needed on here as there seems to be many that misled me and probably many other readers
2yr
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The author is upfront about the character's shortcomings, especially the male leads. In most stories like these, authors portray the 'Male Yandere' characteristics as something good. Something doughy-eyed love-struck females crave for. Reality is different. Being stalked is terrifying, so is being blackmailed. The female lead's reactions are realistic and believable. Now with that disastrous start, I am curious as to how the female lead will fall for the male. Interesting is the least I can say.

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Reveal spoiler

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A fascinating and quite well written story that I can't get enough of this book. The story line is so easy to follow and will trap you with its cliff hangers. I like author's style of writing, it's simple yet neat and very well written. This author updates regularly and has great characters design. As for the story, so far both leads are well described and the story is going to interesting direction. At first it's so easy to fall for Siena as she's really a sweet girl but I can't lie that in the beginning, I quite dislike the male lead from what he's introduced. But as the story goes, I'm beginning to like this Czar as actually he's not bad as I thought. In fact he's quite gentle and sweet when he's Siena. Overall it's really good reading experience and will continue see how the story is going. Dazzling five stars for your creative writing. Honestly I know it's extremely hard for new writers (us) to get easy recognition and decent exposure here in Webnovel, I hope you can write it to the very end. Best luck to you.

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Just started the book and I'm loving it. Even though it isn't my cup of tea, this however still made me linger. The female lead's reactions are actually realistic and believable. Now with that dreadful start, I am interested as to how the female lead will fall for the male. Thrilling is the least I can say.

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