Item: A Possessive Mafia Leader
Rating: 1.2
Author: NerdyBookworm_

NerdyBookworm_Lv143yr

2021-07-02 21:48

I honestly don't know how there are so many good reviews on here. The grammar is awful, something I thought I would read past as there are some books that don't have amazing grammar but a good story line. But this made it very difficult to follow in some places, making me re read to see what character is speaking. The first couple of chapters basically repeat the synopsis of who each character is. It jumps from ML and FL pov but it just repeats what happens between them (which would have been fine I suppose IF it didn't just repeat using the same exact words what happened. So its just re reading what the previous chapter has been put except for their different days being the only difference) There are times that made me wonder if the author did research into the mafia world because from what I'd read (i think I made it to chapter 12) there weren't even 'soldiers' to do their dirty work. But anyway I don't want to keep ranting as I'm sure you will read it for yourselves.. but what threw me completely off from the story .. AFTER READING REVIEWS OF HOW REALISTIC THE STORY IS: Was how she suddenly felt she loved him. After one date .. a month apart of not seeing each other, the only thing he had been doing for such a 'possessive' man was texting and calling her in that time. But yeah that's my review. update stability .. well it's completed book. world background - yeah it's got the basics. All in all.. very disappointed

A Possessive Mafia Leader

4Maggievasiredz

4.7

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Liked by 9 people

Replies6

Megana4Lv2

Thank you for the feedback, dear. I will consider your suggestion and fix it.

3yr

LizbellaLv13

Hmmmmm Did you even cross check your work before posting? You are writing about awful grammar but ended up hitting yourself. What do you mean by"so many good reviews on here"? You need to have a little wisdom human.

2yr

NerdyBookworm_Lv14

No because I'm not a writer or editor but this was hard to follow

Lizbella:Hmmmmm Did you even cross check your work before posting? You are writing about awful grammar but ended up hitting yourself. What do you mean by"so many good reviews on here"? You need to have a little wisdom human.

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2yr

LizbellaLv13

Okay. Am also so sorry for my reply. Writing a novel is not so easy. I know you are being truthful but I'd advise that we should take precautions not to hurt the next person with our wiriteups

NerdyBookworm_:No because I'm not a writer or editor but this was hard to follow

2yr

NerdyBookworm_Lv14

This is true and I feel bad for my tone. But I think a truthful review was needed on here as there seems to be many that misled me and probably many other readers

Lizbella:Okay. Am also so sorry for my reply. Writing a novel is not so easy. I know you are being truthful but I'd advise that we should take precautions not to hurt the next person with our wiriteups

2yr

LizbellaLv13

Okay. Can you give my book a try?

NerdyBookworm_:This is true and I feel bad for my tone. But I think a truthful review was needed on here as there seems to be many that misled me and probably many other readers

2yr

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