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2021-08-13 18:54

I love the novel with the various characters and so on. The one thing I hate is that there is too many POV's, tend to forget minor characters unless to will be relevant to the plot. Some minor characters reappearing and that messes my flow.

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RVN_1998
RVN_1998Author

Hello there, here is the author. It's become a tradition to do self-reviews here on this site, so I won't be the one to break it... In this little review, I want to talk about the 5 points you can find when making your own review. But before that, I want to say that originally the novel will be divided into volumes, which should reach the mark of 8-10 volumes at the end. Anyway, let's get down to business. Writing quality: English is not my first language, so there will certainly be some mistakes, but I will endeavor to improve this whenever possible. Therefore, I thank you in advance for any correction indicated. Update stability: Although I have my own activities, which can prevent me from writing daily, but I have an abundance of chapters ready. So, I can guarantee that, at least in the coming months, there will be at least one chapter being released each day. As for a higher release rate or extra chapters, this will depend on the votes received by the novel. Story development: There are major and minor plots in the story that will be developed little by little. The speed of progression can be quite varied, in some points it will be a little slower and in others it will be faster. This depends on the importance of each part to the overall story. Character design: For certain reasons, the protagonist will be very intelligent from the beginning of the story. But he is still a person who needs help and who has room for improvement. There will also be some problems so that the character has a certain space to mature, so you can expect some changes to happen... World background: You can expect a lot of information from this world that the MC is in. Whenever I'm writing, I try to make it clear in the text what situation the protagonist is in. Where is he? What is the difference in strength for your opponents? What's outside the protagonist's realm? How is the world where he is? Races... Etc. Anyway, there is certainly a lot of space to be explored. Well, I think that's it. This is my first time writing, so I'm still learning... Anyway, I hope the story is satisfactory!

Ankit_Deokuliar
Ankit_DeokuliarLv2

Before thinking whether to read the novel or not just read the first chapter on author thought. The storyline and plot is surprisingly detailed and the author managed to write a story where the world doesn't revolve around MC but it's not a multiple POV type story. (Good for me) All major encounters with other characters are logical and they don't just pop out of nowhere just because the plot demands it...they are always given a little background which makes them alive and believable.... except MC's mother side of family. but I guess that will be revealed later. Side characters appear and leave logically and not because of random plot. The story has 2-3 cliche parts but the execution and results are very different from the normal...(*spoiler- there is tournaments and mc finding rare spirit beast and a young master goes after the MC for he talked to his supposed wife/girl...but in a totally different way*) Otherwise this story is kingdom building in a poor abandoned land...mc has his OP inheritance but doesn't use hack techniques to improve his land but simply expensive very scarce resources which any normal lord will spend only on himself. In short the kingdom building is realistic too, compared to other novels where mc is either reincarnation from future or from earth... Another thing in novel you will find interesting is the cultivation system and the structure of cultivation world in general. the difference between different states of cultivation is not insurmountable and those in the same stages is even more so... atleast in the starting and mid stages...this makes it interesting as just having higher cultivation doesn't mean sure victory..it comes down to how good their techniques are and thier teamwork.... This is refreshing after reading so many one man army MCs... The world-building in general is great the noble families, the commoners they act differently than the stereotype established in other novels...like nobles are oppressive and common men are miserable and only the mc saves them and they will grateful to eternity. well that's it ..I ranted a lot .... author keep up the good work, I generally don't start reading new novels unless they have 300+ chapters coz this site has given me many heartbreaks but I changed my mind after reading your first chapter so don't you dare disappoint me by dropping it.

_Olly_
_Olly_Lv15

In my opinion one of the best novels I've read on this site so far. Writing quality: apart from some very rare and minor mistakes, the writing is great, especially considering English is not the author's first language Story updates: very regular updates, generally with 2 chapters per day, but as a greedy reader it can never be enough :) Story development:I find the story in general is very well planned out and with a good progression. Main character, while stronger than others at the same level, is not instantly OP. Kingdom building is also very nicely done in a believable way. Something I'm very happy about is also that the characters don't have 1000 skills which make everything really confusing like in other novels, making fight scenes much more engaging. The main reason I gave 4 instead of 5 stars is due to the somewhat slow pace more apparent during one ark of the story (Between chapters 200-400 if I remember correctly), manly due to "information dumps" placed often in the middle of conversations (need to say though that much of this information becomes relevant afterwards so it is indeed needed, and the story still remained very interesting). Fortunately after that the pace starts picking up and is very enjoyable afterwards, not too slow but also not chaotic. Character design: characters are well designed and they act according to their personalities. There is also interesting character growth for some characters. World background: also nicely done, with distinct regional powers and interactions between them. Looking forward to how the Black Plains start interacting with the rest of the world. As for other novels I would be very happy if a there was a map available. In general I highly recommend this novel.

Jims_Rid
Jims_RidLv4

Overall, this novel is decent but there are a few issues. First is, the author explains too much. There's too much explanation about some new building and how it works. Some are unnecessary and some can be said as it is. Second, the fact that the MC dealt with no issues with the citizens apart from the fact that they're too weak is unrealistic. People get jobs and suddenly, they're happy and no problems occurred afterwards. In every place, there are always problematic people. Drunkards for example. There were even no mention of thievery in Dry City, as if everyone just turned obedient conveniently for the MC. Even if every single one of them got jobs, some habits, while they can be dealt with, they don't die easily. Mass migration from people of different places should have introduced some problems but for some reason, they were obedient. Also, the fact that people from other places could successfully migrate to the Black Plain without leaving any traces is also quite unrealistic. If it's the soldiers, then there would be no issues but civilians are hard to control, especially when they weren't yours or when the cultures are different. There is also the lack of skepticism. Although the author tried to explain this part, the fact that the whole population of a city just disappears and migrates to the Black Plain is quite unrealistic. No one stayed behind, especially the old people, who are (not all) supposed to be the most stubborn and difficult to persuade. I'm still currently on chap 371 so the author might have already addressed these on the not so recent chapters but even if he still hasn't, I hope the author reads this for improvement. Overall, this novel is, as I said, decent and full of potential.

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