A fanfic with a lot of potential but suffering from an inexperienced author. the starting chapters could be a bit boring and immaturish, especially for someone who've already read PJ series. Our MCs presence doesn't change anything much and you might get frustrated by how passive he seems. But the fic really takes off after Kronos's death. The mc starts changing things and differs from canon Poseidon. this is where i felt like i was finally reading about a SI posiedon changing the future instead of history just repeating itself without any changes. it improves a lot as a fic when si starts making waves. In short i like this fic and would be following its progress closely. I would've loved to give it a 4-4.5 but unfortunately that would be a false review. as i said earlier, the author is inexperienced and doesn't seem like a native English speaker and you can see that in the writing. it's still better than most of the crap on this site. Plus he can only improve as he gets experienced. all in all, not a masterpiece by any rights but still a great attempt at writing and a fanfic with a lot of potential and room for improvement. hopefully it won't be dropped.
AfricanProdigy14
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LIKEnah no need for that. i dont know about any cause i never check it. i just assumed it was free cause a lot of comments seem to advise that to authors.
AfricanProdigy14:But ill be glad to check out any sites for that, dont think my parents will pay fir that thoimage
Ah, sorry for assuming. there were a few grammatical mistakes though, so maybe a proofreader would be useful. or one of those online sites to check for any mistakes.
AfricanProdigy14:But i am a native english speaker?
VictorRust2410:Ah, sorry for assuming. there were a few grammatical mistakes though, so maybe a proofreader would be useful. or one of those online sites to check for any mistakes.
VictorRust2410:Ah, sorry for assuming. there were a few grammatical mistakes though, so maybe a proofreader would be useful. or one of those online sites to check for any mistakes.
yeah your name kinda gave it away lol. but anyway, this is a really great fic for your age, and don't let any haters force you to drop it. as i said, you aren't a bad author, just inexperienced and that'll be easily fixed with time. you can only improve as you continue to write afterall.
AfricanProdigy14:I’m only in eighth grade
AfricanProdigy14:But ill be glad to check out any sites for that, dont think my parents will pay fir that thoimage