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2021-07-12 12:26

Everything is good and amazing, but there are a few issues that should be listed. 1-The demon. He has unconditional mind control and memory viewing. This is just OP and should be revised. 2-The system. It is literally put down by a low ranked demon for no reason other than to slow development. 3- The teleportation. Every character and their mother has teleportation. This needs to be changed somehow. It serves no right that a low ranked demon adventurer can teleport, but the guard captain of a city lord cannot. 4-The world, no one has cellphones or even communication devices using magic, but they have advanced potions to translate literal gibberish to fluent language.

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