Item: Broken Demon
Rating: 3.4
Author: McKnight5206

McKnight5206Lv144yr

2021-04-12 07:21

I have read the first ten chapters and while the characters and world seem interesting enough, the grammer and spelling mistakes make it verry confusing to read. There is also a few times where characters are talking to one another but it is unclear who is speaking. I think it is shaping up to be a good read, but it is in desperate need of a proofreader

Broken Demon

shabnam

4.6

83 Chs

Liked it!

Replies2

shabnam_jeddikarLv1

Hello dear friend, my name is Shabnam and I am the author of the book Broken Demon. At first, I wanted to thank you for the excellent point you made, I trusted my editing program, and well ... it turned out that it doesn't work that well! I agree that my grammar needs to be improved and I think it's not a surprise because English isn't my first language and this book is my first experience in writing an English book. I am working on improving the grammar and errors of my book and I hope to be able to perfect it soon! Based on your effective review I edited all the parts of my book again, and I feel that it has improved a bit. And it would be nice to have an observer reader like you with us, stay with the journey, I'm sure it will surprise you!

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McKnight5206Lv14

Great to hear. I will pick it back up

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