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Hello! I've read your book until the very end and I would like to give you my review, though not asked, and leave a few notes on a few things that I believe I can be improved in the future. I'm really liking the story so far, the plot is quite interesting, confusing at some parts but nevertheless a good achievement, and the fact that it meddles with the mystical world, it gets me stuck on the screen. I still have a lot of questions regarthing the motives behind the hunt of our heroine and how does human bonds play the part, but I'm sure they will be answered in the next chapters. On to the next point, I don't know if it's related or not but, Raphael and Crowley reminds me of the series 'Good Omens', and I can't exactly stop my mind to go to those characters. It's cool because their personalities here displayed, it kind of matches. I'm interested in seeing how she'll grow and how will their bond strengthen. Can't wait to read about their adventures. Finally, I just wanna brought to your attention that you need to be more attentive to misspelling and grammatical errors, it difficults the reading greatly. But that's my personal opinion. Also, I advise you to better hint when your changing perspectives, I mean, when you're changing the first subject of the dialogue, do it so we can understand that thoughts and the dislogues it's from, per example, are from the queen and not from any other character. Doing it poorly, it gets confusing and becomes a demotivating factor. And that's all! Keep up with the good work, you're on the right track, my fellow writer!

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Thank you for your constructive criticism. It is very important for me since it is my first book. Please continue to comment on later chapters as well. It would be highly appreciated.