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Story goes bad really fast. The author is taking some inspiration, but unfortunately from the wrong places... -4 genins in team 7(or any other team) is one of the stupidest thing and least creative thing I've ever seen it would never happen. -If future shinobi would need 5 years of treatment from something that he knows is fake, then surely he needs to change current his aim and be a civilian, cuz obviously even a civilian would take less time, and rape on kunoichis isn't even a thing, nobody is stupid enough to do this(there could be a technique that prevents them and no one sane would even take a chance in the world of professional killers), rape wasn't mentioned once in naruto. -Harem doesn't fit this world at all, if u want to write fanfic with this type of theme chose world that features it like dxd, thing like CRA isn't even a canon, people think it is, but it isn't, it was created by fanfictions.
Wanting More (Naruto Fanfic)
TruckkunJr
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I've decided to make a 4 man team for the simple reason is that it makes more sense even though it would never happen. 2 of them have the Sharingan that could control the Nine tails which the other 2 have. Also it was said Hiruzen wanted Kakashi in canon to put Sasuke down the right path. The 5 years of trying therapy due to Tsukuyomi is acceptable. Itachi could put someone in there for a whole life example in the novel when Itachi put Izumi in it so she can experience a life with Itachi. So a week in there then times that by 10. 70 days of agony and torture. As for the Restoration Act well that's for the harem to make sense so I took that idea from other Fanfics and that YouTube video of Naruto being Uchiha. Plus Sasuke should of spreaded his seed like Yujiro, The Chad of all. If you don't like my explaination and think it is as an excuse than it's alright. Thanks anyway for the review, hope you can find a better Naruto Fanfic.
Kunoichi's being raped actually make sense maybe it isn't mentioned in Naruto because it doesn't go towards the darkside of the Shinobi world. The strong abuse the weak so, it won't surprise me bandits or jonins of an opposite Village raping them. Things have been mentioned worst in Naruto compared to rape for example Orochimaru experimenting on alive kids and adults even worst.
Duh... What u saying makes no sense, no one would take a risk to rape kunoichi in the world of killers... Half-intelligent people can figure it out, in a world where chakra exists if u think that no one in the whole history of it would make something counter it, then u are too short-sighted ... so it clearly isn't mentioned cuz shinobis are people clearly aware of the risk, not to mention that most of them have a personality disorder .U are saying first that don't want to go toward the dark side of the shinobi world, and after a while, u conflict it with writing that Orochimaru human experiments... I don't know what for u is worse rape or experiments on children.
TruckkunJr:Kunoichi's being raped actually make sense maybe it isn't mentioned in Naruto because it doesn't go towards the darkside of the Shinobi world. The strong abuse the weak so, it won't surprise me bandits or jonins of an opposite Village raping them. Things have been mentioned worst in Naruto compared to rape for example Orochimaru experimenting on alive kids and adults even worst.
😂😂😂 You think because a women has chakra that a man wouldn't rape her. That's actually funny! Cultivation novels give you an example of no matter how powerful you are, they can easily decapitate or find a way to stop them from using their power and do it to them. Also in war anything can happen, I don't get where your going with this. As for you saying the darkside of Naruto, my fanfic is all about it and how dark the Shinobi world is. Also Both of them are disgusting, I just believe experimenting on children is more messed up than rape. Doesn't me rape isn't close to experimenting on kids.
Righteous_Serpent:Duh... What u saying makes no sense, no one would take a risk to rape kunoichi in the world of killers... Half-intelligent people can figure it out, in a world where chakra exists if u think that no one in the whole history of it would make something counter it, then u are too short-sighted ... so it clearly isn't mentioned cuz shinobis are people clearly aware of the risk, not to mention that most of them have a personality disorder .U are saying first that don't want to go toward the dark side of the shinobi world, and after a while, u conflict it with writing that Orochimaru human experiments... I don't know what for u is worse rape or experiments on children.
Are u trying to be dumb or just half-reading what I am saying, this no cultivation novel, cuz in most the good cultivation novels something like rape on cultivator wouldn't happen, take for example Tales of Herding gods or My senior brother is to Steady, there are both top 10 IMHO on this site, I didn't write that just cuz they have chakra, I said that they could be developed techniques that counter it, I will just do example cuz I thing that u are defending something that doesn't have any statements in amine or manga, take for example Anko she may be poisoned with poison that she is immune but others are not it may not. Besides, i don't know why I am even answering this question when it's a world of Shinobi whom most of them have a personality disorder and that's clearly showed even in the firsts episodes(Kakashi reaction when naruto first-time naruto used kyuubi chakra). So don't write something stupid cuz it would be mentioned in manga or anime if it was a thing, but it isn't so that what's canon...
TruckkunJr:😂😂😂 You think because a women has chakra that a man wouldn't rape her. That's actually funny! Cultivation novels give you an example of no matter how powerful you are, they can easily decapitate or find a way to stop them from using their power and do it to them. Also in war anything can happen, I don't get where your going with this. As for you saying the darkside of Naruto, my fanfic is all about it and how dark the Shinobi world is. Also Both of them are disgusting, I just believe experimenting on children is more messed up than rape. Doesn't me rape isn't close to experimenting on kids.
Not all have a personality disorder also cultivation novels are an example due to both things having the same belief of strong rules though in the Cultivation world it has rape in them so don't say they don't just cause you haven't read some that doesn't mean their isn't and we don't know if they have something to stop that but it's likely they don't, it's the Shinobi era so people wouldn't of thought of it. Also it's a Fanfic, I make the rules so not everything will be the same. Though I still try and keep it canon as much as possible but I will add twist onto it that I see as most realistic things as well as things that could bring the tags into the fanfic that still make some sense.
Righteous_Serpent:Are u trying to be dumb or just half-reading what I am saying, this no cultivation novel, cuz in most the good cultivation novels something like rape on cultivator wouldn't happen, take for example Tales of Herding gods or My senior brother is to Steady, there are both top 10 IMHO on this site, I didn't write that just cuz they have chakra, I said that they could be developed techniques that counter it, I will just do example cuz I thing that u are defending something that doesn't have any statements in amine or manga, take for example Anko she may be poisoned with poison that she is immune but others are not it may not. Besides, i don't know why I am even answering this question when it's a world of Shinobi whom most of them have a personality disorder and that's clearly showed even in the firsts episodes(Kakashi reaction when naruto first-time naruto used kyuubi chakra). So don't write something stupid cuz it would be mentioned in manga or anime if it was a thing, but it isn't so that what's canon...
If u talk about some bad face-slapping cultivation novel then u have to change ur tastes, besides, why are u comparing cultivation and naruto it doesn't make any sense, the strongest person doesn't rule in the naruto world, Kage doesn't have the highest authority in their country daimyo(a civilian) has, without civilians there wouldn't be shinobis... did u even read/watch naruto if yes then watch it again and now don't skip anything cuz u are clearly lacking, in naruto the civilian are people that shinobis serves. If u think that Kishimoto wouldn't care about writing about child experiments and didn't want to even mention rape cuz it's to hight level s**t, then u need to re-read/re-watch naruto, cuz Kishimoto wouldn't care about something like this when he wrote worse. Don't write something and don't compare the cultivation novel cuz it doesn't make any sense even the energy they manipulate isn't even close when in most cultivation novels they use spiritual energy...
TruckkunJr:Not all have a personality disorder also cultivation novels are an example due to both things having the same belief of strong rules though in the Cultivation world it has rape in them so don't say they don't just cause you haven't read some that doesn't mean their isn't and we don't know if they have something to stop that but it's likely they don't, it's the Shinobi era so people wouldn't of thought of it. Also it's a Fanfic, I make the rules so not everything will be the same. Though I still try and keep it canon as much as possible but I will add twist onto it that I see as most realistic things as well as things that could bring the tags into the fanfic that still make some sense.
Just speaking to you is pissing me off. They have no comparison, only that the strong rules against the weak and K know almost everything up to boruto, I've watched 2x over. Also the Naruto world is more R-16 then R-18. I know the whole system of how the village is ranked and the history of the Shinobi world. Just accept I've added stuff that makes more sense if you was in that era.
Righteous_Serpent:If u talk about some bad face-slapping cultivation novel then u have to change ur tastes, besides, why are u comparing cultivation and naruto it doesn't make any sense, the strongest person doesn't rule in the naruto world, Kage doesn't have the highest authority in their country daimyo(a civilian) has, without civilians there wouldn't be shinobis... did u even read/watch naruto if yes then watch it again and now don't skip anything cuz u are clearly lacking, in naruto the civilian are people that shinobis serves. If u think that Kishimoto wouldn't care about writing about child experiments and didn't want to even mention rape cuz it's to hight level s**t, then u need to re-read/re-watch naruto, cuz Kishimoto wouldn't care about something like this when he wrote worse. Don't write something and don't compare the cultivation novel cuz it doesn't make any sense even the energy they manipulate isn't even close when in most cultivation novels they use spiritual energy...
No, u don't know... U are clearly lacking in ur knowledge about Naruto world... Kage may or may not be the strongest in the villages cuz they are chosen by the council(like Jiraya wasn't Hokage even if he was stronger than Hiruzen, and am not saying that prime Hiruzen was weaker than Jiraya only the facts that old Hiruzen was weaker than both Jiraya and Tsunade, I don't know about other villages other than leaf), and strong not rule the weak in naruto world, the wars in shinobi world don't include civilians they are clearly shinobi wars, and shinobi do mission for money that they get for civilians which clearly mean that without civilians there is no shinobi, and I'm here not even saying a thing about daimyo who rule whole country included shinobi villages. Whole shinobi system revolves around missions given by civilians, so stfu if u are lacking in brain...
TruckkunJr:Just speaking to you is pissing me off. They have no comparison, only that the strong rules against the weak and K know almost everything up to boruto, I've watched 2x over. Also the Naruto world is more R-16 then R-18. I know the whole system of how the village is ranked and the history of the Shinobi world. Just accept I've added stuff that makes more sense if you was in that era.
Don't get lippy. The village was made from Clans without Civilian's until they inhabited it also the Shinobi don't protect the Civilian's but the whole village. Civilian's can also become Shinobi's but must of them can't because of lack of chakra. Also the shit I was talking about strong ruling the weak isn't nothing to do with Civilian's. Villages fight against one another for money, power and to become the strongest village. Simply the strong rule against the weak, this is also shown when the Uchiha Clan's police force was being to forceful to the civillans. I know as well of Shinobi's getting hired for jobs. That's how it happened in the warring state causing the Uchiha and Senju clan to become rival's due their equal power. I don't lack Knowledge.
Righteous_Serpent:No, u don't know... U are clearly lacking in ur knowledge about Naruto world... Kage may or may not be the strongest in the villages cuz they are chosen by the council(like Jiraya wasn't Hokage even if he was stronger than Hiruzen, and am not saying that prime Hiruzen was weaker than Jiraya only the facts that old Hiruzen was weaker than both Jiraya and Tsunade, I don't know about other villages other than leaf), and strong not rule the weak in naruto world, the wars in shinobi world don't include civilians they are clearly shinobi wars, and shinobi do mission for money that they get for civilians which clearly mean that without civilians there is no shinobi, and I'm here not even saying a thing about daimyo who rule whole country included shinobi villages. Whole shinobi system revolves around missions given by civilians, so stfu if u are lacking in brain...
I'm crying, can u write something that's canon and not ur imagination? I don't really have much time to write a reply to someone who isn't even giving canon statements( i don't know if something like the Uchiha police force was forceful in anime but if it was, it was clearly in filler.) The fact that civilians can become shinobi is as good as the fact that you also can become paid killer...And shinobi is paid killers, they still lived on mainly from missions that civilians gave them and they still had to obey daimyo for example 12 guardians of daiymo were most likely created before the era of shinobe villages. Besides for what are u even arguing when naruto is settled in feudal japan setting and shinobi there serve feudal lord(daimyo). And stop lying about insufficient chakra, cuz that was never a thing, they just didn't pass examination, and most of them are orphans of children of shinobi who were probably oprhans...
TruckkunJr:Don't get lippy. The village was made from Clans without Civilian's until they inhabited it also the Shinobi don't protect the Civilian's but the whole village. Civilian's can also become Shinobi's but must of them can't because of lack of chakra. Also the shit I was talking about strong ruling the weak isn't nothing to do with Civilian's. Villages fight against one another for money, power and to become the strongest village. Simply the strong rule against the weak, this is also shown when the Uchiha Clan's police force was being to forceful to the civillans. I know as well of Shinobi's getting hired for jobs. That's how it happened in the warring state causing the Uchiha and Senju clan to become rival's due their equal power. I don't lack Knowledge.
I know all of this. The Daimyo is the real leader of there separate territory like the land of fire, water, earth and lightning. Also the reason Civilian's decide to become a Shinobi is because of the brain washing of being a Shinobi is the greatest thing and to protect their village. That's why they become killers. I make my fanfic out of the consideratiom of canon for example the 4 man team as well as my own ideas while trying it to make sense. This last time I'm replying to someone that don't even understand where I'm going with my fanfic. You might as well leave it alone, you clearly don't like it because 'it makes no sense'. Good day.
Righteous_Serpent:I'm crying, can u write something that's canon and not ur imagination? I don't really have much time to write a reply to someone who isn't even giving canon statements( i don't know if something like the Uchiha police force was forceful in anime but if it was, it was clearly in filler.) The fact that civilians can become shinobi is as good as the fact that you also can become paid killer...And shinobi is paid killers, they still lived on mainly from missions that civilians gave them and they still had to obey daimyo for example 12 guardians of daiymo were most likely created before the era of shinobe villages. Besides for what are u even arguing when naruto is settled in feudal japan setting and shinobi there serve feudal lord(daimyo). And stop lying about insufficient chakra, cuz that was never a thing, they just didn't pass examination, and most of them are orphans of children of shinobi who were probably oprhans...
No, they are not brainwashed, they just don't have better choices, u don't see a civilian shinobi from ordinary parents, all civilian shinobi presented in naruto were orphans, they didn't have better choises, cuz they couldn't go to another school that shinobi one. All civilian shinobi u see are all orphans Jiraya, Orochi, Minato... I clearly won the whole confrontation between us, u just don't want to admit it, stating that's how u were trying to write it :)
TruckkunJr:I know all of this. The Daimyo is the real leader of there separate territory like the land of fire, water, earth and lightning. Also the reason Civilian's decide to become a Shinobi is because of the brain washing of being a Shinobi is the greatest thing and to protect their village. That's why they become killers. I make my fanfic out of the consideratiom of canon for example the 4 man team as well as my own ideas while trying it to make sense. This last time I'm replying to someone that don't even understand where I'm going with my fanfic. You might as well leave it alone, you clearly don't like it because 'it makes no sense'. Good day.
😑😑😑 Yes you are right about the orphan thing but having no other choice. Makes no sense. Idc neither about whoever won the 'confrontation' I just don't like when someone chats shit.
Righteous_Serpent:No, they are not brainwashed, they just don't have better choices, u don't see a civilian shinobi from ordinary parents, all civilian shinobi presented in naruto were orphans, they didn't have better choises, cuz they couldn't go to another school that shinobi one. All civilian shinobi u see are all orphans Jiraya, Orochi, Minato... I clearly won the whole confrontation between us, u just don't want to admit it, stating that's how u were trying to write it :)
TruckkunJr:😑😑😑 Yes you are right about the orphan thing but having no other choice. Makes no sense. Idc neither about whoever won the 'confrontation' I just don't like when someone chats shit.
what you say makes sense. Naruto never really portrayed the dark sides of the shinobi world due to its target audience. Looking forward to reading this. It's rare to find a realistic author. keep up the good work.
TruckkunJr:Kunoichi's being raped actually make sense maybe it isn't mentioned in Naruto because it doesn't go towards the darkside of the Shinobi world. The strong abuse the weak so, it won't surprise me bandits or jonins of an opposite Village raping them. Things have been mentioned worst in Naruto compared to rape for example Orochimaru experimenting on alive kids and adults even worst.
Righteous_Serpent:No, they are not brainwashed, they just don't have better choices, u don't see a civilian shinobi from ordinary parents, all civilian shinobi presented in naruto were orphans, they didn't have better choises, cuz they couldn't go to another school that shinobi one. All civilian shinobi u see are all orphans Jiraya, Orochi, Minato... I clearly won the whole confrontation between us, u just don't want to admit it, stating that's how u were trying to write it :)