Review Detail of amaturewriter in One Step at a Time.
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why dope? spoiler...................... -SI MC way before cannon [ with special parents ], well written chps, like grammar and shit and some new shit here and there. so dope. very dope why shitty/bad/stupid? -MC has wished for talent, critical thinking, energy manipulation as wish's and yet is only master 1v1 at 14 -MC is an SI with knowledge -MC was trained by [ literal, no exaggeration ..u fan of OG u know why ] 2 strongest people since young and only master lvl 14 - 15 -MC's genetics alone would be enough to make him a god in his verse, his genetics. -The force of the moment of him being stabbed. that was really forced. also I will say it is almost impossible considering his moms character and her power and how fast she is. she was already over protective of him for yrs before by keeping him from the outside world for yrs, my ass she'd leave him for a couple minuits -Also the parents keeping him separated for safety is retarded considering the dad of MC at old age could easily fight everyone, here he is in prime and the mom is 2 nd strongest -The lack of exploration of all the shit you've added. you've just listed em. you should;ve explored more. suggestion....remove the wishes...MC's genetics and SI knowledge would already make him OP. explore all the places and character relationships more through flashbacks or something, its there but feels empty. *note...kenichi took a couple months to become master lvl + and MC with all the stupid shit he has, the teachers, wishes, genetics, memories, etc should've already been grandmaster lvl.
One Step at a Time.
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Thanks for the truthful review. I would love to give my thought process on all the aspects, you pointed out, but some, I just couldn't do, I am a new writer, after all, others I did not think about, and most I hope to answer along with the story, without it being excused. I hope you stick long enough to see if my answers are good enough for you or at least some. Once again thanks for being truthful in your opinion, of my story. As you can see half of the reviews are complaining, and don't really point anything out.
I think what author thoughts about Kenichi being strong so fast is quite reasonable. Not only Kenichi but also other characters also progressing quite fast compared to their power in their respective first appearance. Because the plot started so the shit began to go awry, so people need to get bigger, stronger. After all developement could progressed so fast because theres a need to. Just like how the Nuke first came to play.
No...you are wrong. MC has the literal strongest people in the world training him since a young age [ DAD 1, MOM 2 ] and then he was later trained by more stronger MA's ,MC has the best genes [ genes matter ], MC is reincarnated, an *****, 2 life times, MC has wishes, All these make you point irrelevant. MC needed help from master lvl people [ like later chps ]. so u are wrong. The author shouldnt have given so much hax and nerfed the MC to the point where its completely retarded. thats why I said the disease excuse or just remove all wishes. he is only master lvl with all these points mentioned above and he still need help. for fks sake, he has energy manipulation, meta knowledge, best genes, best parents, best teachers, reincarnated soul, trained since a child, had a head start compared to everyone. so No, you point is wrong,
FlipFlopFckBoy:I think what author thoughts about Kenichi being strong so fast is quite reasonable. Not only Kenichi but also other characters also progressing quite fast compared to their power in their respective first appearance. Because the plot started so the shit began to go awry, so people need to get bigger, stronger. After all developement could progressed so fast because theres a need to. Just like how the Nuke first came to play.
You know why you are even more wrong? the MC wised for Martial arts, Fighting [ yes--this too ]. Understanding and critical thinking, just these alone would make someone a god. mix this with his parentage/teachers, genes, ***** life and how can kenichi match him? so no, not up for debate. lol. MC has hax compared his verse
FlipFlopFckBoy:I think what author thoughts about Kenichi being strong so fast is quite reasonable. Not only Kenichi but also other characters also progressing quite fast compared to their power in their respective first appearance. Because the plot started so the shit began to go awry, so people need to get bigger, stronger. After all developement could progressed so fast because theres a need to. Just like how the Nuke first came to play.
