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2021-02-08 20:59

the novel is interesting and the plotlines were great... the only issue I have were the paragraphs that they were too big that the author can actually cut it down into miniparagraphs.. but overall, it is a good novel.

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I think it's a good idea. I'll shorten the paragraphs while editing.

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