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Jo_J
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2021-05-29 20:15

I start from the beginning... all of us are here to learn and improve our skills and talent. As I always say - dream, work hard, reach the dreams, and dream again... You're doing a stunning job and I absolutely don't want to discourage you, on the contrary, I encourage you to make some minor corrections... From the synopsis, it looks that you have an attractive idea and I love your siblings. They have lovely personalities. I hope the 5 stars, collection, and a few powers stones will help.

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Thank you I will surely improve my work.

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