Man oh, man, have I been glad to read this. Lately I've been on a RWBY fanfic binge, and I'm proud to say that this is one of the ones I've enjoyed the most. The 2nd person POV threw me at first, but once you're over it it's not a problem. In a way it's what I imagine a GM reading out a campaign in D&D would be like (don't quote me here I've never played...). Starting at the fall of Beacon. Well, you've got balls to begin the story there, but I like it. Starting this far in the fic has the disadvantage of cutting out the introductions and development of the other characters (the main cast of RWBY). Unless you've already watched RWBY or binged enough fanfics on it, then it can be harder to understand and get the feel for what the original cast is like (however considering this is a fanfic, and I'm guessing most of the target audience already knows enough about the cast, this isn't too much of a problem). I love that the MC is a Grimm, I've found it hard to find any fics with a Grimm MC/OC/SI so finding it here is awesome. (Hey, if you know any other Grimm MC fics, please tell me ~<3 Grimm) I do feel that the MC's nature as a Grimm could be better explored. Aside from getting a stronger body, the ability to sense emotion and a direct line to Salem, it's not really explored if it affects his nature at all. Personally I would expect some greater urges or drives because of this, (unless I missed it) but this isn't shown from what I can see. An upfront pervy bastard. Awesome, I get the impression of a younger, cooler and smoother Jiraiya, which is always a win in my books. On the Ecchi action... Keep up the good work. Although I feel that the willingness of characters to perform 'Ecchi-like' is more pronounced compared to how these characters act in other fics, I approve. Ecchi fics may not be my bread-and-butter, but I like dipping into them from time to time and I can say that so far, you've done a good job. On a side note ~ crossing my fingers and hoping that his human form (when he gets it) look like Grimmjow from Bleach. Just... Cause... CAUSE HE LOOKS AWESOME! Grimmjow is best boy! and look >.> here! 'Grimm'jow. He's got Grimm in his NAME! Anyway... Good job, I hope you keep it up. Loving it so far (I'm at c45 rn) and Nora/Neo BEST GIRLS. Although Ruby and Pyrrha are pretty cute too ~O.O~ Best Wishes -This Random Fanfic Addict (Not my actual username on any media)
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