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You just have to see how everything unfolds and see if the story goes up or down but other than that I like it is a bit similar to the previous one but you can tell the difference

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you were doing fine until episode 8, at that point you screwed up tremendously, meaningless power levels, zero logic, nerfs (to the league and the team), etc, etc, etc, I'm going to stop reading this because I can't handle the disappointment

I really like this story. It's a great concept. The story pacing and the speed in which the MC gains strength could use a bit of work, but other than that I don't really have any complaints. Thanks for the chapters you wrote so far. I'll be impatiently awaiting your next update.

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This fic is really good. There aren't lot of good ben10 fics here in wn, so it's really refreshing to see one such as this. The earlier version was already decent, being above average, but after the re-write it really stepped up a level in quality. I didn't really notice any spelling mistake, and if I did see some, then it didn't really bother me. Some people might find that some events are forced, like when he met Bobby for exemple, but it didn't really bother me in any way. Character development is present, and is one of the strong points of this novel in my opinion, because even if we didn't see any major changes to the mc's behavior, the people around him feel alive and have emotions. The best example of that is Laura, as we see the hot-headed girl who suffered a hard childhood and assaulted the mc without hesitation in beginning gradually open up to others and developing feelings towards the only person who stayed by her side apart from Logan, the mc. So yeah, a great fic overall, though the only thing that's really problematic would be the updating stability as of late, but that won't change the fact this is a great fic, and it really lives up to the great idea that gave birth to this. I really look forward to the character interactions between mc and those in the "normal" dimension (I sure do hope he will keep close to Bobby in the future, I can smell a very good friendship coming) after this time skip where Laura and him have basically gone missing for them. Anyway, I first of all thank you, hope everything's going well for you author, and that you'll have enough free time to continue this amazing fan-fic.

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The history is good but I feel like 2 things are wrong. 1-The Mc is too carefree with Xarles, he is a telepath and not a good person but that's no reason for the Mc to simply go all revolted teenager on him, Xarles is dangerous and manipulative this could have ended really bad for him, make the Mc a little bit more aware of his words. 2- As a reader, I don't think the Mc can lose, the way you write it makes it look like he will always win, I mean he passed through some difficulties but it didn't really felt like enough, if he lost some battle or something significant I think your history would be much better.