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2021-01-13 06:21

has a lot of potential continue ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

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This fic is really good. There aren't lot of good ben10 fics here in wn, so it's really refreshing to see one such as this. The earlier version was already decent, being above average, but after the re-write it really stepped up a level in quality. I didn't really notice any spelling mistake, and if I did see some, then it didn't really bother me. Some people might find that some events are forced, like when he met Bobby for exemple, but it didn't really bother me in any way. Character development is present, and is one of the strong points of this novel in my opinion, because even if we didn't see any major changes to the mc's behavior, the people around him feel alive and have emotions. The best example of that is Laura, as we see the hot-headed girl who suffered a hard childhood and assaulted the mc without hesitation in beginning gradually open up to others and developing feelings towards the only person who stayed by her side apart from Logan, the mc. So yeah, a great fic overall, though the only thing that's really problematic would be the updating stability as of late, but that won't change the fact this is a great fic, and it really lives up to the great idea that gave birth to this. I really look forward to the character interactions between mc and those in the "normal" dimension (I sure do hope he will keep close to Bobby in the future, I can smell a very good friendship coming) after this time skip where Laura and him have basically gone missing for them. Anyway, I first of all thank you, hope everything's going well for you author, and that you'll have enough free time to continue this amazing fan-fic.

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