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BlackArchangel
BlackArchangelLv103yr
2021-05-02 23:11

I'm fan of cultivation novel, this is one of the good so far I've read. The story has so much potential. Currently I'm at chap.150 and I wanted give few advice if author don't mind . 1. I noticed you skipping 90% of fight just by announcing the result. IMO it'll be more entertaining if add how he defeated hus opponent or how he was defeated in a fight. 2. In important fights even try to the give description of the technique, stance how the weapon look like etc 3. Add more detail while describing character because it help us imagine the in head. Like what their height how their figure ( silm, skiny, well bulit etc) how the look like, what they're waring etc. 4. If you can then give us a auxiliary chapter regarding details of cultivation realm, like the name of the initial level, grades of alchemist and formation master, also level of the alchemy item (Pill, Potion), array level, weapon grade etc.

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TheArcher7
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All around this story is average. It's a cultivation novel with typical cliches and a few typical features, but I haven't seen anything new yet. Sometimes that's good, because you just want to have an enjoyable read, and indeed some people love how "fast paced" the novel is, but not me. The grammar is near flawless but the author's command of the English language is lacking. Moments seem to drag on forever and the writing seems to circle itself in a repetitive manner. These things happen mostly due to a bland, unvarried word choice. For readers like me, with higher expectations, I'm simply bored from reading it. Plot-wise the story is average too. The world building doesnt seem very deep and there aren't very many characters, as if the author doesnt want to put the work in to making a large world. The time period and cultures aren't established (with either the use of objects, technology, or references). Nothing. Furthermore the magic system is lacking. Even by chapter 30, when the MC has broken through two planes, I still dont know what the planes are, what the consequences of cultivating improperly are, what the elements are, or how the elements are used (in combat) ect. Even by chapter 30 there has been only one fight and it was totally lackluster. Missed opportunity for demonstrating the magic system in action. Over all I would say average. I am still very impressed with the grammar, but there's unfortunately no character or charm to the writing. So even though it isn't distracting from the story, it is still detracting. Author should go back to rework scenes and actively use synonyms. Every adjective in a chapter should be unique. Every verb should be specifically chosen to best describe an action.

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